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By mr.body
10 April 2008
this poem is based in the fact that nuthing is serton.

How can we fix something that was never howle?
How do you fill a bottomless hole?
How do see what is not there?
How can I win, if you dont play fer?
Once I am here, how do I depart?
Now that am finished, how do I restart?
Now that Iv song, why must I die?
Is this the truth or all just lies?

Is this the end or just my time to fly?

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Written by mia_ms_kim (951 comments posted) 9th April 2008
This sounds like a piece on pessimism rather than the fact that nothing is certain. (I think Quantun mechanics when someone says nothing is certain.) But it's interesting. I'm not sure if this is a poem, though it sounds poetic in places... I'm no poet myself, so... Anyway, made me think. 
 
Mia 8)

Written by fellpony (1569 comments posted) 10th April 2008
Sounds like some of the Proverbs. You can hear a rhyme and write a couplet, mr.body - but you might like to run the spellchecker over things like nuthing, serton, howle, fer, I'v song!  
 
All right as a practice piece, as a starting point.

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