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Josie's Challenge
By rilLie
11 April 2008

My shot at Josie's Challenge (Bees). Took a while, but I wanted to try it, so.. yes. :'D


So much depends
upon
three small words
expressed
with big hugs
like smiles
for the lonely
people.

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Really Good
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 11th April 2008
Really good riLie. I think though this might be better - just a VERY small change: "three small words expressed with BIG hugs and smiles" - I'm not sure that you can have a sweet hug, but you will know all about sweet smiles, I am absolutely sure riLie.

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 11th April 2008
okay~! :'D Thank you, Josie~ ^_^

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