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Poetry
Song for a Lonesome Constellation
By Merioneth
11 April 2008
Poetry is not my strong suit, but I dabble sometimes.

Looped through the fingers of my left hand
is a rosary, entwined like ivy
grown up round chicken wire
and I'm using each bead like an abacus
tallying prayers I've never whispered
to a deaf and distant god

The curl of the fingers on my right hand
crests like a wave, and breaks
over the marker in my palm
which I used to annex all my birthmarks
if my body were the sky and my flaws the stars
this would be my constellation

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Impressive...
Written by Steve_K (54 comments posted) 11th April 2008
Impressive from someone who doesn't consider poetry their strong suit. This was powerful. Superb imagery which you managed to convey brilliantly. Especially liked:  
"The curl of the fingers on my right hand 
crests like a wave, and breaks 
over the marker in my palm..." Nice write..

Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 11th April 2008
Liked this - will likely return for another read. 
 
Phil

Written by mia_ms_kim (975 comments posted) 11th April 2008
I'm just so impressed. It seems to touch the edge of everything - pain, depth, cynicim, beauty, self-love... Beautiful... I was blown away by your Obsurata. And now this poem! You hope you will give us something of everything. 
 
Mia ;)

Written by Veronica_Milvus (595 comments posted) 12th April 2008
I saw this yesterday but didn't comment until I had a chance to take a second look at it today. I think poetry is your strong suit, this was a very powerful image. Hope you send us some more of your poetry.

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