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Drama Scripts
Further relations Scene 3
By BrianRobertNeal
08 November 2005
It's funny but I've grown to heavily dislike this play.

It would be so helpful if just one person made a comment or if a piece was just ignored. But I feel obliged to those kind enough to have read so far to at least take it to the end of act one.


Brian


SCENE 3-ENTER HAFLING
NARRATOR- Nigel was wakened by banging on the front door. He looked at his watch it was 9.15. Arwen lay on top of the bed naked and little. He bent to kiss her and she grabbed him and wrapped her legs round him. They heard Halfling's voice-"Mum, Nige are you there? The 2 jumped up, Arwen grabbed her clothes and ran into the en-suite-"tell her I'm having a shower". Nigel heard the water go on. So Nigel quickly dressed and ran down and let Halfling in. They go into the kitchen.
HALFLING-You don't have to tell me what you two were doing!
NIGEL- I was changing out of my suit and your mother was having a shower.
HALFLING-You've got big bites on your neck.
NIGEL- The midges round here are gigantic.
HALFLING-Where's Georgie and Gerry?
NIGEL-I think they've gone out, oh yes there is a note, oh they've gone to Georgie's to get her things.
HALFLING- Why, what has happened to Georgie?
NARRATOR-Nigel explained to Halfling and then Arwen came down with her head swathed in a towel and wearing a dressing gown.
HALFLING-Hello Midge.
ARWEN-Pardon.
HALFLING-Ask Nigel.
ARWEN-What are you doing here?
HALFLING-They've found Asbestos in our college buildings and the HSE have shut it down. The College are finding places for us 1st years at other Teaching Hospitals, I said that I wanted a local college so it will probably be one of the London Hospitals. They will be refunding my Hall of Residence fees within the next few weeks.
NIGEL-By the way Gerry and Georgie have gone to Georgie's to pick up a few things I don't know when they will be back. Now Halfling you get yourself upstairs and I'll order a Chinese meal they usually take 30 minutes to deliver.
NARRATOR- Halfling takes her bags upstairs. Arwen paces too and fro.
NIGEL- What's the matter?
ARWEN- I know when Halfling's lying, she never looked me in the eye. She never wanted to go to University, Brian and his bloody mother gave her no choice. She got awful grades and only got in on the clearance system. His mother will say it was "all your fault" Nigel, she'll say "Maude needed a fathers hand".
NIGEL-You don't know do you? So don't jump.
ARWEN- Don't you tell me what to do or you and your bloody family can just get out!
NIGEL-Well sod you I will, but you can tell Gerry and Georgie because you were the one who gave out the invitations.
NARRATOR-Arwen went to the freezer and grabbed a handful of ready meals. Nigel however had gone upstairs, grabbed his away bag and shot downstairs. Nigel sometimes at the shortest of notice had to go and take over a branch office and so he had a bag set up with a change of clothes, shaving gear and so on. Arwen heard the door bang and thought that it was Georgie and Gerry coming back. Then she heard Nigel's car shoot down onto the drive and race away.
He'll be back she thought but she forgot that Nigel still had his company flat. Arwen phoned Nigel's mobile but it was switched off.
Georgie and Gerry pulled in round the back parked the van and the car and then Gerry let the pair of them into the Kitchen. Halfling came down and went into the kitchen.
GEORGIE-Arwen what's the matter?
ARWEN- Halfling's left University and Nigel's left me.
GERRY -Come on Georgie back to your place. I'll be back for my things tomorrow.
NARRATOR-Gerry shot Georgie into the garden and closed the door. The pair drove off. Arwen stared at her daughter then suddenly shouted.
ARWEN-Why don't you go and live with your bloody father? Look what you have done.
HALFLING- Because I live here, and I love you and I hate my father and his awful mother. And mum you are wrong I've got 3 interviews for places in London teaching Hospitals. So mum what is the matter?
ARWEN-Halfling I keep dropping things and bumping into things. And sometimes my arms and legs go numb.
HALFLING-Mum sit down I'll make us a cup of tea.
NARRATOR- Halfling makes the tea but there is a heavy silence. Both women are very anxious, Arwen's mother had gone like that, hardly any warning and she was dead. Then there was the sound of several vehicles, following which, the backdoor opened.
GERRY-I've brought Nigel back, do I get a reward. You two are as bad as each other, he had gone round the company flat so that's where I caught him and Georgie went and got us all a Chinese Meal.
HALFLING-You must be Gerry.
GERRY -You must be Halfling. Georgie and I will serve the meals up.
NARRATOR-Despite company Arwen and Nigel threw themselves at each other and but for the prospect of a Chinese meal might have gone back upstairs.

Reviews
Great drama
Written by Alice (64 comments posted) 21st November 2005
Hey Brian, 
I wasn't sure where to post this, but I thought this was as good a place as any. This is very readable with some cracking dialogue. I'm not surprised it has been read by a lot of people. However, when it comes to reviewing, you need to remember a couple of things. 
1. Guests and passers-by cannot post a review; and 
2. This topic makes for heavier reading than, say a short story or poem. Perhaps, not many people either feel that they can or want to undertake such reading on a specialised writing subject. 
 
I don't profess to be an expert on drama scripts, but I like this. I like the characters, I like their dialogue and I like the plot. What more can I say? Essentially, it makes very good reading. 
Can I ask you to answer this for me. What plans do you have for this script? What is it's purpose? Where did it start? 
 
Alice
Hi Alice
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 30th May 2006
This was posted when I was off and away on another web-site so I just found it. 
 
So thanks for your time and comments. 
 
I must give you a PM.

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