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Poetry
saturday morning
By wt
12 April 2008
Which witch was I with
Was it the white one
Or the one black
Whose enchantment led curvature
Was as caramel smooth
As bailey’s on ice
Was it the widow
Or the one married
With kids on her mind but caged
No she wasn’t quite right
To write or ride
Hm let me think
What sorcery blew my mind
Sweet as the salt on my shoulder
Licked by my tongue
After a dip in her ocean
On a Friday night

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You devil you...
Written by Steve_K (54 comments posted) 12th April 2008
If only I had more Friday nights/Saturday mornings as yourself, I would be quite happy with myself! I liked this piece, sounds off the cuff and free flowing. Loved the image: 
"Was as caramel smooth  
As bailey’s on ice.." 
I'd say it was the black one you were with ;)

Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 12th April 2008
I too thought this stood out: 
Was as caramel smooth  
As bailey’s on ice 
 
It works so easily. 
 
I'd say it at least should have been black. You'd have had ore fun. 
 
Phil 
 

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