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Who's Been Here? (A spring poem for children)
By Josie
12 April 2008


This is a spring poem for younger children.  (With voice recording: http://www.whiteheadm.co.uk/html/whos_been.html#whosbeen)








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      Look out of  your window.  Now, who has been here?
   
      Well somebody has, that is perfectly clear.
          So who told the leaves on the trees to unfold,
          And gave trees pink blossom out there in the cold?
 

      Who went to our gardens and filled them with flowers?

      Who touched the clouds and sent down the showers?
          Then who told the birds that it’s time to build nests?   
          Her name starts with “S” as I think that you’ve guessed.
 

      She crept in one morning and melted the snow.
  
      Then touched the wet soil, and told flowers to grow.
         She told Old Man Winter to take himself off 
         For his coldness has left many people with coughs.
 

   The gloomy black clouds were sent packing as well.
   The long, winter evenings have said their farewell.
       Now listen to birds singing high in the trees.
       In this lovely sunshine,  here come the bees. 

 
 The primroses bloom on the banks in the lane,
  
Their sweet yellow faces all wet from the rain.        
     
The fields are now filled with lambs at their play.
       Oh thank you, dear Spring.  Please don't go away.
 







Copyright 2008
www.whiteheadm.co.uk

Reviews
Spring
Written by Bonbon (15 comments posted) 14th April 2008
I think it was a very nice poem because the ryming is very good.The poem was good because it explained spring in a fun and easy way. :grin

Written by Merioneth (79 comments posted) 14th April 2008
Josie, this was lovely. I know it is intended to teach children about a certain style of poetry, but I can't help but think it might also make an excellent children's book, with lots of pastel illustrations and vibrant images. I know you worked very hard on this and it shows. 
 
It reminds me of the canonical poems from my childhood. This has the makings of a classic.
Simply Superb!
Written by Katanga (717 comments posted) 18th April 2008
Yes, simply superb! Your gentle personification of Spring literally brought tears to my eyes - yes really! It's so beautifully visual and almost 'aching' with gentleness.
Thank you all
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 18th April 2008
Thank you so much for your kind reviews. Now, who needs to come and tell the rain to stop raining, and the sun to start shining? Her name starts with S. ha ha. John, please borrow my hanky. I can't have you like this, with tears in your eyes. ha ha. Merioneth, I think it would make a nice book too, and so would my poem "An Autumn Visit" a few pages back. I couldn't imagine ever seeing it in print though, so I'll leave it on my website. Bonbon, thanks too. I love to get a review from a child.
lovely!
Written by PuppyWuppy (15 comments posted) 18th April 2008
this is an adorable poem! put a smile on me face.I just know that any little children would love it, as would their parents!

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