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Poetry
sidelong in the wind
By andybyers
13 April 2008
the taste of hazelnut coffee is
    the ribbon wrapped around the rain
    the autumn echoes
       its first footsteps peel the leaves

softly it settles upon her shoulders
    a Persian cat curled 'round her soul
the cup gives her the taste,
    she returns lipstick
        plum red on alabaster
            porcelain and skin

and she is waiting
    thinking hard on something
    cup clutched in her hands like
        a bird that might fly
        or fall like leaves that
        rain and gravity might fell,
death their only voyage in life,
        sidelong in the wind
    fly or fall,
        she is waiting

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Written by Steve_K (58 comments posted) 13th April 2008
Great poem Andy. You really packed it with so many beautiful images ie. 
 
"the taste of hazelnut coffee is 
the ribbon wrapped around the rain..." lovely alliteration here! 
 
"..a Persian cat curled 'round her soul.."  
 
"..cup clutched in her hands like 
a bird that might fly.." These two images of the persian cat and the cup as being a bird that might fly are very evocative. Nice write. 

Written by andybyers (181 comments posted) 15th April 2008
Thanks, Steve. :) I utterly missed the alliteration myself (at least, I don't remember doing it consciously). The words just seemed to work well... I guess that was why!

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