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By Phil
13 April 2008
I'm finding writing difficult at the moment. Not so much writers' block, as not being able to concentrate on anything for longer than ten minutes.

This is a bit of 'keeping my hand in.' Nostalgia - last refuge of the desperate.

At this time of year, while the trees are still bare, from where I’m sitting I can look between two houses and see a patch of water of the local lake. Round here, they are called lodges. I think this practice started during the industrial revolution where a ready supply of water was a valuable commodity. All over Bolton small lodges were created, usually next to huge mills. Most of the mills are now demolished, but several of the lodges remain providing small oases of tranquillity in the urban landscape. My lodge is larger, prettier and more imaginatively named than most: Doffcocker Lodge. Right on the edge of town, it only has houses to three sides and is home to a range of water fowl. Protected by the local conservation trust, it remains peaceful and unblighted by commercial activity.

Beyond the lodge, if I allow my eyes to travel above the bare branches of the trees, I see a small band of houses and above them, low, golden moors. Golden isn’t a word often used to describe the West Pennine Moors at this time of year. After all, it would be hard to imagine anything so wet and Tupperware grey as a Lancashire sky reflecting any other colour than shades of old blanket. The sun rarely appears to cast its glow on the heather and grass to warm it. Today though, the moors bask and glow.

Atop the moors to the left stands a solitary TV mast that marks Winter Hill. Thin, silver and erect, it punctuates the sky line – more often than not, piercing the clouds. If I set off walking, I could be at its base within the hour. At night, the mast is lit from top to bottom with powerful red lights, I assume to avert some airborne disaster. Two years ago, I was persuaded to accompany the cub pack there on a midnight hike carrying twenty-three warm pasties in my rucksack. The midnight hike with the cubs ended with a local historian lecturing the boys on a murder committed there some one hundred and seventy years ago. The place the body was discovered is marked with a plaque on an iron stump. George Henderson, a twenty year old Scottish salesman, was shot by person or persons unknown. Twenty-three young boys now think his spirit roams the moors.

If I’m out and about around Bolton or travelling back from Yorkshire, this mast lights the way back to where I’m sitting now. It’s not just a geographical marker, but an emotional one. While I’m still a Yorkshireman at heart, I’ve chosen to live my life in a corner of Lancashire that now holds the most important emotional ties I have. The mast provides a beacon I can look towards and I sense that somewhere over in that direction is security and family. While it’s only a large transmission pole that marks the peak of a pretty ordinary hill – it broadcasts to me, something completely different – home.

Reviews

Written by philkent (157 comments posted) 13th April 2008
Lovely piece of work Phil. 
 
One of the best things about writing is being able to take our everyday surroundings, celebrate them and imbue them with a sense of life and drama. 
 
Even here in my non descript little corner of suburbia I can sometimes wax poetic about the veiw from my window. The patterns and colours in the sky, the quality of light the way even the grimy tower blocks in the distance can be turned into golden monoliths at sunset. 
 
You have the added advantage of living in what sounds a very scenic area.  
 
Very beautifully written. 
 
Phil

Written by Brett (482 comments posted) 13th April 2008
I enjoyed this very much, Phil. I think I know the mast that you refer to. 
I love your description 'anything so wet and Tupperware grey.' And to inspire the boys to think that the murdered man's spirit roams the moors - excellent. 
 
Cheers

Written by wt (137 comments posted) 13th April 2008
interesting bit of meditation phil. 
 
I personally like your non-fiction better than your fiction as I sense an underlying potential for a powerful style of social/other documentary there..which is crisp and that can absorb humor, satire, tragedy, imagery.... (as well as poetry of course!) 
 
Would be nice if your fictional themes could emanate from this style rather than suffocate it.. 
 
Regards 
wt 
 
 
 

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 13th April 2008
Thanks Phil, Brett, wt. Odd you should say that, wt. I've started subbing a few piece here and there - small press only - and the only thing I've managed to sell was a piece similar in style to this. 
 
Thanks again.
Hi Phil
Written by jean.day (2196 comments posted) 13th April 2008
This was beautifully written. Your lodge and the golden moors and the red-lit mast sound very lovely indeed. 
 
My question is, did did pasties stay warm for that long winter walk?

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 13th April 2008
Thanks Jean. 
 
Wrapped in tin foil, they were still warm when we arrived. Fortunately, not all the cubs liked pasties - so as I as in charge of distribution - I had my fill. 
 
Phil

Written by mia_ms_kim (891 comments posted) 13th April 2008
If this is what you write amid dry spells and distractions, Phil, I wonder what you can write when you are inspired! Beautiful. I don't know if there is a term for it, there seem to be writers who do "psychological geography" very well. Without too many words or detail, some writers paint just the right picture and bring readers right into their world, both inner and outer. And you do this superbly. And you seem to live in a wonderful place. 
 
Mia :)
Well structured
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3136 comments posted) 14th April 2008
A really excellent bit of writing, and despite your witty comment in the preamble you managed to filter out any cloying sense of nostalgia [even if the desperation was real] and instead created a tangible sense of place.  
In fact it reminded me, in it’s journalistic style, of the Alistair Cooke letters. He had a knack of making you feel you know the place, as this piece does. Another quality is shares with Cooke’s work is the satisfying way it was structured. It was so beautifully put together. I don’t know how long you spent on it but I appreciated the craft that went into it. After introducing us to the place and the specific mast we get some human interest, to populate the world, and a bit of humour; and then back to the mast again, only now we get its full significance; a great set-up and pay-off. 
And the title was the icing on the cake giving it an emotional heart and making more than the sum of its parts. Structure and form is often something that is overlooked in non-fiction pieces [and too many stories, come to that!] but it really is the magic element in any narrative piece. 
Maybe others should read and learn. 

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 14th April 2008
Thanks Mia and Jane. Lovely comments, both.

Written by Lizzy (781 comments posted) 14th April 2008
I think Jane has said it all. 
An inspiring piece that makes me look out of my window but I don't think I could 'put' as much into my view as you did. 
'Doffcocker Lodge' is lovely, do you know its derivation? 
Good one 
Lizzy

Written by coosh (822 comments posted) 14th April 2008
I felt a similar response to BBS as regards the structure of this piece, and the way you lead the reader towards the TV mast, and its dual function/symbolism. It strikes me that you've developed a concept from your earlier nostalgia work, moving on to emotional triggers and examining how things start to create memories in childhood (the cubs) and other ties. In some ways, this is more complex and has more substance. I'd also agree that the most significant emotional ties, geographically speaking, are not necessarily the home of childhood. Fascinating piece of observation.

Written by Livinginanattic (454 comments posted) 14th April 2008
This has a very professional feel about it Phil. I can only echo what's already been said - well structured, with lovely use of language, and nicely illustrated with your story of the midnight hike.

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 15th April 2008
So you're a bit of an exile in Bolton? Nicely described piece and probably a good way to get over a writer's block. Is there something in the Yorkshire water that makes you people write like that?

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 15th April 2008
Thanks for reading and commenting. 
 
Makes us people write like what, Fledermaus? 
 
Phil

Written by fellpony (1507 comments posted) 17th April 2008
Sorry, Phil, I am late coming to this! I can picture where you are now - knowing roughly the location of the mast from north-south journeys over the years. You capture the sense of place very strongly. Sometimes our roots are not those of birth.

Written by nsperfect71 (44 comments posted) 18th April 2008
Taking this peek at what you call home, Phil, I can't resist thinking how some people, like my 'Christina' would envy your 'local conservation trust' and the protection it provides to your surroundings. Sorry if I sound too obssessed with her. I think I am  
 
I suppose the beauty of writing is that we all bring our background into the creative effort and the diversity of it is what makes each of us unique. It's a corny thought, I know. But I hope you guys don't mind me being corny from time to time! 
 
I doubt that I would be able to take such a fresh, original look at my surroundings and describe them in such an interesting way. I might try my hand at this one day. I'm sure it would be an interesting exercise. :)
concentration
Written by robokent (84 comments posted) 20th April 2008
P, 
 
Loved the imagery. I've never been to the place you're describing, never been outside of London in the UK, but it was easy to see. Magnificent line about the color of an old blanket.  
 
Though you mentioned it's hard to concentrate at the moment, this piece seems to me pretty locked in. 
 
RK

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