This is just a silly poem. It isn't true. It's only make-believe. My real teacher is called Mrs Bullock and she is really very nice.
My teacher’s like an alien
Who comes from outer space.
She only has one big black eye
In the centre of her face.
Her nose is where her ears should be;
When she sneezes the room shakes.
Her tongue is long and purple
And it looks just like a snake.
She has blue hair upon her head.
We all think that she has fleas.
For she spends all day just scratching
And her name is Mrs Cheese.
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Written by mia_ms_kim (915 comments posted) 14th April 2008 |
What a fun poem. I'm not a child, but I really like this. But I wonder if you can think of a more "alienish" name for the teacher - after all that cute monstrosity, Mrs Cheese might sound just a little too tame? (I think I
might have liked some weird sounding galaxy name better.) But that's a tiny point I make because I liked this very much. Lovely!
Mia  |
Goodness me!
Written by Josie (2538 comments posted) 15th April 2008 |
| I hope you never dream of Mrs Cheese. She sounds like a monster all right. I suppose that Cheese is a good name to rhyme with fleas - but a strange combination of thoughts. I can understand why you wrote this. Teacher, aliens and monsters are popular thoughts for a 9 year old. ha ha. Well done! |
Written by mia_ms_kim (915 comments posted) 15th April 2008 |
Bonbon, I didn't realise you were 9 years old when I wrote the review earlier! I thought I was talking to an adult who wrote fun poems for children. Wow. I'm totally impressed now. Keep up the good work.
Mia  |
Heehee
Written by Jellybean (7 comments posted) 16th April 2008 |
I thought this was very funny, a great poem!! I'm 15, but i still enjoyed reading this. I didn't start writing until i was 11, so i think it is clear that you are talented. Congratulations! |
Great Stuff!
Written by Katanga (805 comments posted) 18th April 2008 |
I thoroughly enjoyed this and I'm 51 years old!
I actually think the name Mrs Cheese is perfect, with its associations with smelliness and even corniness - it also has a kind irrelevant light absurdity about it (in the best possible sense) that fits in well with the wonderfully bizarre content. Keep writing Bonbon! |
Written by mosw30987 (17 comments posted) 18th April 2008 |
great poem bonbon. keep writing please.
Fareed
9  |
Written by Brett (527 comments posted) 18th April 2008 |
This really is impressive, bonbon. I love the idea of her nose being where her ears should be.
It is nice to hear that someone so young wishes to be a poet and you clearly have the ability. I look forward to reading more of your writing. Well done. |
Thankyou
Written by Bonbon (15 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
| Thankyou everybody for your great reviews!I'm still busy writingso look again at the end of the week when i will have a couple of new poems. |
I'm envious
Written by edjones (14 comments posted) 24th April 2008 |
| This is a smashing poem that made me laugh. I'm 64 but age makes no difference to the enjoyment of such good work. I think, as many do, that there is no such thing as 'children's writing' or writing only for children; there is only good writing, and this is very good. |
Thank you Ed
Written by Bonbon (15 comments posted) 24th April 2008 |
| Thank you very much Ed for your review and I'm vety glad that you liked Mrs Cheese because I like her too. |
Written by 1211kellie (95 comments posted) 5th June 2008 |
I really enjoyed this, its very funny and I am impressed that you can write such good material at your age.
I didn't write my first poem until I was 37.
Well done.
Please keep writing, I'd like to see more of your work on GW
KellieX |
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