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By Veronica_Milvus
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15 April 2008 |
Two weeks ago I spent the weekend at Oxford University studying "The megalithic monuments of Britain and Brittany". We had a great talk called "Stonehenge for the Living" from Dr Tim Darvill, of Bournemouth University, who started a dig at this most famous site a couple of days later, you can see the details on the BBC Timewatch website. This poem is based on his ideas that Stonehenge was a place of healing. In fact he thinks it was a "franchise" healing site, spun out from the original one in the Preseli hills, where the stones came from.
I struggled with the poem, I wanted to do something descriptive of the stones, with lots of intense, Dylan-Thomasy language, but I couldn't get away from telling a story from the point of view of one of the people who built the monument.
This is a true story... maybe.
BLUESTONES
From the sacred mountains of the farthest west,
split from rocky tor with water, wood, and fire
we took them; asking their forgiveness,
we dragged them. At every famished stop
we bound our bleeding hands, mended ropes
gave thanks for our progress, and pressed on.
We raised them up like towers
inside our ditch and bank, a circle-casting,
their flinty fingers pointing silently
at the standstill moon. Gathered there among them
we bid the spirits of our homeland come
and live among us, no longer godless here.
Their fresh-hewn surface sparkles like midnight;
galaxies garnered there on every plane,
the universe reflected. And at the healing time
the people come with hammerstones and break
a fragment of the cosmos, for its power.
As the spirits grant these morsels of themselves
the stones ring out their voices, as they do in Preseli.
This is how we did the bidding of the Gods.
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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 15th April 2008 | Really like this, particularly the 'motion', feel and rhythm of the first. Phil | Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 16th April 2008 | | I can see how much hard work you have put into this poem Veronica. It really shows. The subject is interesting and I liked the use of language, especially : Their fresh-hewn surface sparkles like the midnight galaxies garnered there on every surface ......." Excellent description. I lived at Swindon for many years and often went south past these stones. They are so solid and they remind you how small man is in comparison, and, as you said, how difficult it must have been for men, years ago, to have moved such stones. Wonderful poem! | Your language Written by shirley_keeldar (67 comments posted) 16th April 2008 | You dont need "Dylan-Thomasy" language when your own is this gorgeous, well done L | Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 16th April 2008 | Fine bit of work Veronica - with some intriguing, scholarly ideas inside the language. Like Josie, I admire the lines: "Their fresh-hewn surface sparkles like midnight; galaxies garnered ..." | Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 18th April 2008 | | I love the 'physicality' here and the richness of your imagery. I admire the same lines as Josie and fellpony, quoted above, but with one small misgiving - I'm not sure about the repetition of the word 'surface', but I may be missing something here? | Written by Veronica_Milvus (637 comments posted) 18th April 2008 | You are right Katanga - I will edit that surface thing! thanks | galaxies garnered Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 30th June 2008 | remarkable image -- I think I emailed about this one . patterjack |
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