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Poetry
Smithereens
By alandavidpritchard
20 April 2008
 

The explosion was spectacular:

a pyrotechnic delight for those who lived afar,

 

and for us too,

in that flash of exuberant abandon,

momentarily dazzled, basking

in the disbelief that

something could be that bright.

 

Sparks to rival stars -

my God it was as if a fireworks factory

had finally found the arsonist’s flame,

and once the fuse was lit

all of fate could
ejaculate with fluorescent fury.

 
Man, it was fucking beautiful! 


Oh, we were so blown away,

rocketed by intense fuels

into some far-off, new-found fabulous place,

 

like out of space where only we  matter

and where  truth is,

foolishly believing we might be

only slightly singed along the way.

 

Problem was,

and the truth of the matter is,

“destroyed”  is too tame

to describe what we did,

that night we detonated all our desires at once –

the orgasmic pyroclastic

decimation of our former selves.

 

We thought we would be fused together in one

fabulous flight of physics, as substantial as the sun 

 
instead we found the heat
too searing, too scorching, too intense
  ...


the flash melted our eyes

and we exploded

and vaporised.

   

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Written by Veronica_Milvus (637 comments posted) 20th April 2008
Oh wow, I like this, a real tumble of powerful images. I thought of 9/11, the fuel depot that went up at Buncefield, and there was a fireworks factory that exploded not that long ago. And also of a reckless passion that was doomed to disaster. 
 
Especially good was the stanza starting "sparks to rival stars". 
 
Man, it was fucking beautiful!

Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 20th April 2008
Thanks Veronica 
 
Your comments are much appreciated 
 

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