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The Last of the Summer Show
Written by fellpony
20 April 2008
Once upon a time, our Merseyside suburb had a park, and in that park it held a Summer Show. The last Show was in 1971. And I was there.

I don't have enough material for a story so it will have to be a rough, narrative poem.

For three days beforehand, men laid out acres of canvas,
dumped and hauled masts to an upright stance,
reaved ropes through pulleys and strained
marquees into existence. The Fair arrived
and built waltzers and roundabouts,
shooting galleries and carded dartboards.
Security men and dogs patrolled all through the night
along the post and wire boundaries and through the tents
for the first time in eleven years; and still
five eggs disappeared (the secretary
rather suspected the German Shepherd.)
Saturday was dark and squally. At nine
pulleys were squeaking mournfully and the canvas
beating up and down like bellows
under an uncertain wind. The trestles
looked just a little empty if you knew
the fullness of other years. Nine thirty
closure for judging: shuffling entries
to other classes to use up the prizes.
And the wind fell, and the rain lashed down.
The doorways sprouted yellow straw
and the dogs barked in frustration
at small wet toughs with nothing to do
but stand enticingly near. Inside,
persistent leaks puddled washable ink notices
into blue dribbles on the tables.
The fairground calliope wheezed unheeded
through all the old tunes, the ticket booths
forlorn in the park avenues were tenanted
by old men reading newspapers or talking
of last year and the year before, when it wasn’t
at all like this but crowded with sunshine.
Today, only Punch and Judy (indoors),
and the Beauty Contest, took much money.
A display by wet police dogs drew no more
than sarcastic cheers, and the gate receipts,
they say, are down by half on last year’s.
Everyone went home early. There was no dance,
and today the soaked tents came down
and were packed. They won’t be back.  



Reviews

Written by Katanga (1552 comments posted) 20th April 2008
Hi Sue! I think you evoke the success and the physicality of long-gone Summer Shows brilliantly here - the sweat, the labour, the commitment. Your imagery is simply breath-taking! 
 
And then the abrupt shift into pathos and bathos, without even a paragraph break - which seems to me to illustrate the seamless and inevitable loss of the earlier values . . . 
 
Love it! Gosh! John X

Written by Phil (7014 comments posted) 20th April 2008
Funny how we can get all nostalgic for things like this. I could mention a couple of events from my own past. At the time though, we eventually thought them a bit naff and past their time. I suppose TV destroyed a lot of things - that and the slickness that an increasingly wealthy country could provide. Probably, no one did naff entertainment as well as the British. I'd love to go back though - just for a day. Any longer and the pattern of the wall paper on my bedroom wall would drive me mad. 
 
Doesn't seem like much of a review - but our poem really caught the feel of the day - although I have to add, for me it was the late seventies, early eighties. 
 
Phil

Written by Phil (7014 comments posted) 20th April 2008
Sorry, I didn't say - I really liked it. The running ink on the hand written notice was an excellent touch.

Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 20th April 2008
I think most of this is pretty pedestrian, though there are a few bits I like. It echoes the day itself though - good in parts, but you can see why the whole turned out to be a failure :p
cooment
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 20th April 2008
sent in email 
 
patterjack

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