Poetry
A bad day
By punchy
21 April 2008
Today is a bad day
A day when the air has weight
When dreams are left behind to fade
And future left to fate
 
Today is a sad day
When tears obstruct all views
When the ache of hope is stolen clear
And filled with others news
 
Today is a loud day
With angry undertone
The shouts and cries don't bounce back off
Nor do they sit alone
 
Today has not been my day
It's a day I'll pass on by
I'll just use its example
Next time I need to cry

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Written by beatricelouise (216 comments posted) 21st April 2008
This is really a nicely written poem. There's a beat to it, and the words make a lot of sense. Good for you, punchy! 
 
Hope tomorrow is a better day!

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 21st April 2008
I had to take a deep breath after reading this. I'm sure every living person can relate to this. You expressed it very well. The 1st stanza was impacting. It was condensed, compressed and said it all, esp. air having weight. It expressed the heaviness we all feel under pressure. I also liked the last stanza, esp. 1st 2 lines. Strangely it seems to give hope, eg. in the end, it's just another day, it can be let go etc etc. (I wonder if "I'll pass on by' can also be read as a denial???) If not, I'm glad it finished on that note. 
 
Mia ;)
Weighty Air
Written by Katanga (4169 comments posted) 21st April 2008
Beautiful, Punchy! 
 
I may have got it wrong, but I get from this that sometimes we need, but don't want, bad days when the air is heavy, just so that we have a reference point for when we need to cry? 
 
After all, don't we somehow strive to avoid 'the unbearable lightness of being'? 
 
Pretentious, moi? 
 
Ho! Cheers! John X

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