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TRUE LOVE IS IRONING THE CLOTHES
Written by Josie (2851 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
| Hmmm - Very negative Punchy! I don't think you really believe this though or if you do, then you haven't really been in love. Oh, "when she's gone out for the shopping, he's probably IRONING HER CLOTHES". ha ha. If this is love, that is what happens in our home for my husband is the one who likes ironing - not me. He will bring the clothes in off the line and I will find them beautifully ironed and inside the airing cupboard. This is what REAL LOVE is all about. (Should I tell you he even irons the dusters and teatowels, which I never do!)? Yes, I will. |
Written by Phil (7012 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
Josie the dominatrix! 
Thought this got better as it went on, PP. You started to get a little more outrageous - one of your strengths. Enjoyed.
Phil
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Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
Thanks Josie, I don't iron either but nor does my husband, we just wear the creases out with our warmth.
Ironing teatowels and dusters? : 
Phil, it was going to start off as a slightly serious write but I just couldn't help it, almost a form of poetic torretz(scuse spelling).
Thanks again xx |
Written by Brett (1008 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
Nice to have you back, Paula.
I found the first stanzas of this very reminiscient of a time when within a month or two several friends of mine (of both sexes) desperately clung on to the first person who offered them a whiff of cider and they all married!
No common interests just a fear of not being single - AND THIS WAS WHEN THEY WERE IN THEIR MID-TWENTIES! AND THERE'S STILL NO COMMON INTEREST (unless you include what the joint bank account makes).
As for the final stanza...now you mention it...I have my suspicions.
Nice one, Paula.
Cheers. |
Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
Hi Punchy.
A negative view yes, but with a core of truth I think, for it does seem as if romance is over-rated. I personally think being in a relationship is just a state, just as being single is. Both have their advantages and disadvantages, yet for some reason society values the first more (probably as a result of evolution)...
I guess this preoccupation with romantic love is an important cause of distress and loneliness though, as people are constantly being told that it's the best thing that could ever happen to them. Sure, love and romance are nice, but so are the taste of tea and the sound of birds. So you are right that in some cases those pretty words used for romance are in fact rather hollow.
I recently read a most interesting article about 30+ singles. Between 30 and 40 there seem to be about as many single men as there are single women, yet according to that article, women of that age have a much bigger problem with being single than men. Meanwhile though, their numbers increase...
I suppose that means that within a few years I can choose :P
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Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
Thanks Brett and Fledermaus.
It is strange, all my single friends are desperately looking for someone to share their lives with yet a large portion of my married friend are desperately miserable in their marriages.
Anyhow Bottoms up!!!!!!!!! |
Good One!
Written by beatricelouise (215 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
He's probably wearing her clothes? 
Well, true love is hard to find, I would say. Some couples work to make each other happy, while other couples work to make each other miserable. So sad, but so true.
I think people marry so that they don't have to join the Lonely Hearts Club!  |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (769 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
| Ha! Fantastic! The last stanza was a triumph! Great job. |
Written by Phil (7012 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
| Poetic tourettes [sp?] - |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
There is some truth in what you say in this piece, Punchy, except for the extreme case of him wearing her clothes. However in Asia where many couples still marry via arranged marriage, those things are out in the open. Eg. economic potential, looks, family connections etc - and matchmakers get a handsome fees for linking suitable couples together. So there is little need for pretensions. And the fact is, their marriage is often successful, probably because their expectation is more realistic. (But then they have the stress of falling in love with one person, then marrying another - sometimes due to family pressure, and sometimes by his/her mercenary choice. That wipes out any romantic pretentions.) But arranged marriage sued to be the norm in most cultures.
Mia  |
A Desire to Fart
Written by Katanga (1552 comments posted) 21st April 2008 |
Hello Punchy! I'm fascinated by the discussion above, which your poem has provoked!
Superb cynicism, but I hope you have some romance left?
I've recently written a whole series of poems about farting and romance, just in line with your sentiments, but I won't post them yet due to the sensible anality of a lot of our reviewers, whom I respect too much to annoy with my schoolboy gibberish! One day I'll post 'em! Cheers! John X
Ps Anymore from you I shall relish . . .
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Nice
Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 24th April 2008 |
Though this piece of work is a bit negative, but it's not at all depressive. I had fun reading that, well done.
P.S. I hope someday your faith in love will be restored, no matter in what way.  |
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