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Event (Chapter 5 – [9am] Four hours before the event)
By JasonVSKa
17 November 2005
More mystery and more nightmare

Christian is standing in a sitting room full of fire and smoke. 3 burnt bodies are on the floor whose faces can’t be identified. It seemed like they died from the fire. She wakes up and notices she is hot and sweaty. Eventually she goes to the sitting room and sees the mobile phone being charged. She sees a red envelope on the doormat. She baked a custard cake in the kitchen and put it into a container. She returns to the sitting room and switched the mobile on, she notice it was fully charged. She dials a number and a voice answered, “Good afternoon. Who is this?” Christian replies, “Hello Samuel!” Samuel pauses and said, “Christian!? So this is your new mobile.” Christian replies, “No.” She added, “This is Caroline old phone I found in a chest. Don’t you have both her number stored in your mobile?” Samuel answered, “Yes but my first mobile is broken. This is my second one.” He added, “Sorry Christian I am still driving.” They say goodbye and she continue investigate the mobile. Eventually she went to video message and discovered a very disturbing video. Later Samuel and Christian are stuck in a traffic jam. Christian was distraught and asked, “Why do people film a victim being attack in their mobile?” Samuel answered, “As a laugh and to show it to their friends.” The car starts moving and Christian with a container on her lap looked confuse. She asked, “Why would they do that?” Samuel answered, “Because they are bad.” Samuel added, “Bad people have mental problem.” Christian asked, “What mental problem?” Samuel answered, “Like personality disorder such as antisocial, psychopath, sociopath and intermittent explosive disorder.” Christian asked, “What are the symptoms of antisocial?” Samuel answered, “If they have the entire symptoms of lie, cheat, steal, prone to crime, lack guilty conscious and believe their victim are weak. Then they are antisocial.” Christian added, “They are not normal.” Samuel reply, “Normal is what we learn or belief in. That is normality.” Christian added, “That’s true.” Samuel said, “Drugs can also make people do bad things as well.” Christian asked, “Some drugs cause hallucination can’t they?” Samuel nodded and added, “Just like mental illness people, but it is called delusional.” He stops the car soon afterward and said, “We’ve arrived. This is the furthest any car can go.” He takes out a photo from his coat and added, “I forgot to return this to you!” Christian takes it and put it inside her handbag. Samuel said, “I am going to see Mike which is about 10 minute drives from here. So if there is any troubles ring you can let me know.” Christian smiled and replies, “Thank you for the lift darling.” They hugged and Christian leaves the car. She wave’s goodbye to Samuel in his silver car until it was gone. Christian sees the sky is getting dark and the weather is windier. She is standing at a car park and sees Jackie red car parked in it. She remembered that this is the place where the picture of Caroline and the woman was taken. Christian walks away from the car park unaware a caravan has been following her since she left her house.

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