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Poetry
Passion
By Veronica_Milvus
25 April 2008

I keep trying to think of cheerful things about growing older.


PASSION

 

When I was young, I knew the truth

that passion is reserved for youth,

and, having once become a bride

its fleshly power would soon subside

no more to foster love’s embrace,

companionship to take its place.

 

Considered now from middle age

the fires of love can ever rage

a little fuel to fan the embers

and all its past, the heart remembers.

A fire that’s made from timber dry

burns fiercer than when sap is high.

 

From speaking sometimes to the old

(at least to those who’d be so bold

to speak of things indelicate

when we assume they’re celibate)

it seems that passion haunts them still

though maybe harder to fulfil.

 

I am refreshed to realise

- although it comes as some surprise -

that passion’s folly never dies.

Reviews
very true!
Written by fellpony (1617 comments posted) 25th April 2008
"I didn't need rewiring" - a quote I was given by a woman of 76, twice widowed, on taking up with a toyboy of 67 ...
When I'm 64...
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 25th April 2008
... which was a fine piece of expression by the 4 lads, but 15 years past that I can only listen to it with a rueful grin 
 
I am sure that we really oldies never lose the ability to at least think about it even thrpugh our alzheimer's and do so with many an appreciative leer . See my Summertime Song  
 
Joking aside, this is a very good piece of work. It is in a calm philosophical vein, even though it deals with the primal instincts. 
Skill in such expression , particularly in the technical aspects, really seems to be your forte . 
 
patterjack

Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 25th April 2008
This is a lovely piece, Veronica. I like the way that the outlook changes with the ages, and, ironically starts cynically only to become warmer and with a bitter-sweet optimism.  
Some glorious rhymes : 'indelicate/celibate' 
 
And as in so many of your poems you leave that punch to the final line: 
 
'that passion's folly never dies.' 
 
This a piece that deserves revisiting. 
Cheers.

Written by beatricelouise (215 comments posted) 25th April 2008
My, Veronica...What a lovely piece of writing. A smooth, delicate poem from a passionate heart. You definitely have a gift for writing, my dear.  
 
Truly loved this!  
 
:) Bea

Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 25th April 2008
You express for all of us the kind of curiosity we feel, but don't voice aloud about old age. After observing myself and older people I'm getting more and more convinced we feel eternally young inside. I generally find old people more interesting than young people, all those life experiences, wisdom and knowledge! But it does seem that the body doesn't match the picture we hold of ourselves as we get older. I get a rude awakening when some teenage kids treat me as if I'm a dinosaur. Then I wonder how my parents feel, and other elderly men and women feel. I don't think they feel old, just like I don't feel old. Hmmm... You often write poems I find so interesting, Veronica. 
 
Mia ;)

Written by Veronica_Milvus (637 comments posted) 26th April 2008
Thank you all for your kind comments. 
 
Mia. After extensive research, and passing the age at which "life begins" I am convinced we are all about 19 inside our heads. 
 
We do not in fact get much wiser, particularly in matters of the heart.
So Impressed!
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 26th April 2008
So Impressed (again)
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 26th April 2008
Whoops - pressed the wrong button, so a blank precedes this - Sorry! 
 
Veronica - you write with such assurance and insight. Nothing in your work 'jars' in the slightest, as your rythms are faultlees. 
 
Love the phrase 'fleshly power'! 
 
By the way, I think I'm only about 10 inside my head, but then I'm a man (or should I say still a little boy at 51?). 
 
Cheers! John X
wow!
Written by lovelysarah1984 (81 comments posted) 26th April 2008
I loved it. It really touched me and I find it hard for someone else's work to do that. 
 
Thank you.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 26th April 2008
Just about all been said. I really enjoyed reading this - the rhymes added to the piece - and while not particularly subtle - flowed very naturally.  
 
Nobody else has mentioned humour - so I will. For me, there was a gentle comic tone to this. 
 
Phil
Perfect
Written by meadowcroft1964 (102 comments posted) 21st May 2008
Really enjoyed reading your poem. I find it annorying when its assummed if you are over 40 or in someway disabled you've no right to sexual feelings. Good on you for stating different

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