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Advice To A Grandson About Big Cats In An Open Zoo
By patterjack
26 April 2008
I thought it time to write something for children but not for the kiddiewinkies.
I beg you to pardon the admonitory tone , very Victorian era by design.
I intend it for those who can accept free verse of the kind that I have found in some of my many teaching anthologies.
Of course there may be a hidden message for young males.

Advice to a grandson about big cats  in an  open zoo

Look there,  young  grandson, where the  lion lies
lethargic in the grass.  But do not be afraid,
even when he yawns with his fearsome fangs .

Yet you should be wary still,  for his tawny mate
lies somewhere near with her sisters of the pride,
crouched with not even slight twitchings of her tail.

She, my grandson , is the one to fear.

The king of beasts will here display  himself
with his shaken sandy mane and regal roar
to keep your eyes upon him, to betray
your unsuspecting self to their grasping claws.

Let us go now so that we can seek instead
the spotted  leopard or  the glorious black and  gold
of the  tiger in his lair, that most magnificent
of all  the cats to marvel  at .

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Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 26th April 2008
What an advice from a grandfather to his grandson, an advice all young men would do well to heed, in my opinion. Men who have a high regard for the female species, I think, are to be feared. 
 
This almost reads like an ancient Korean proverb. Ancient Korean sages advised that a prudent and courageous wife is pivotal to fulfiling a man's destiny. Korean history and folktales talk of women who saved their men, families and even their country with their ferocious wisdom. 
 
I'm in awe of your superior wisdom, pj. 
 
Mia :)

Written by Veronica_Milvus (769 comments posted) 26th April 2008
Goodness me, what brought that on? I do think it belongs with the poetry, it certainly isn't advice for small kiddies, as you say, but for those on the threshold of adulthood. 
 
But are we girls really that scary? We're all pussycats at heart.
in fact
Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 26th April 2008
the most dangerous of beasts are the horse and the cow. You can subdue lions and other carnivores by feeding them hard, which makes them sleepy and languorous, but the horse and the cow if fed hard get more and more energetic. And in this case the males are worse than the females ... :eek It must be something to do with being vegetarian :grin

Written by Brett (1008 comments posted) 26th April 2008
This does belong in the poetry section, Brian. Sound advice to one of any age I would say. 
 
Cheers

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