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Alice
By Alice
19 November 2005

Is it just me, or is there a full moon tonight?

This is a...well you tell me.


I was just a child

Full of fun

Joyous

Mirth

 

 

Reading was a chore to do

My sister

Better

Read

 

 

Whilst I played in the grass

Hunting flies

With

Dinah

 

 

 

Until one day the rabbit came

A-rambling

Mumbling

‘Late'

 

 

Naturally I followed as

I liked his

Coloured

Coat

 

 

And by his hole in the ground

I drew deep

Silent

Breath

 

 

Step by step with trepidation

Swallowed by

Nothing

Still

 

 

Curiouser, yet

As I fall

Slowly

Down

 

 

Never shall I think I meet

On my feet

Solid

Ground

 

 

And that is how I came to be

Floating up

Not down

Down

 

 

In a topsy-turvy world of

Alice's

mind in

Wonderland.

 

 

Reviews

Written by jean.day (2391 comments posted) 19th November 2005
Interesting formatting - adding to the sense of falling and getting into Alice's mind. I enjoyed this very much.

Written by Alice (64 comments posted) 19th November 2005
Thank you for both reviews. Glad you enjoyed the reading. 
 
Alice

Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 22nd November 2005
You do realise you have to give us a looking-glass poem as well now? ;)

Written by JodhiDee (15 comments posted) 5th December 2005
Really enjoyed that Alice. Again I liked the sense of falling and arriving in Alice's head. The format is fitting for the atmosphere wonderland creates for myself anyway.

Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 26th May 2006
Will admit its just me from the reviews above but found the structure difficult rather than helpful. Interesting and different though. 
 
IPF

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