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Poetry
The Beach
By marchant1219
20 November 2005
I wrote this for my wife for Valentines.

I close my eyes and with outstretched arms, feel the air around me.

The sweet taste of a gentle wind blows across my face, a calming breeze, makes me numb.

The hair on my neck stands straight, as I stand exposed in the arms of my environment, my lover.

Here I find my joy, my strength, the purpose for my existence.

My feet embrace the damp earth as I walk along the shoreline.

The rushing waves grant me peace and serenity.

My heart flutters at the soft touch of your hand embracing mine.

Your locks dance in the wind.

The windows of your soul open to mine.

A tranquil place, of which I long to stay. The feeling is forever, the feeling is purity.

The feeling is perfection.

Your beautiful lips cause me to smile.

Your kiss is inevitable, and timeless as our lips lock in tender affection.

....I awake to find that you are the reality of my daydream. You are my forever and forever my love...


Friday, February 13, 2004

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Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 2nd January 2006
Lovely, sentimental piece. 
 
I would howver, lose 'locks' and replace with hair as you use the word 'lock' later on in relation to lips. 
 
Also  
 
A tranquil place, of which I long to stay. 
 
is a little akward I think you could say 
 
A tranquil place, where I long to stay. 
 
 
Every woman should have a man who can write something like this for her. 
 
Spidey

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