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Domestic
By patterjack
28 April 2008
Having been told by another contributor (in a kindly manner ) to Lighten up, I began to doodle another verse for the kiddiewinkies.  Alas for my vulgar nature -- it finished up as likely be unacceptable both for its moral content and its language use,  so .........

 Domestic

I know that the griller is a useful tool,
highly thought of by medical powers-that-be
to cook, but never to char (that too is a rule!),
the sausages, steak or chops we have for tea.

Whether it's in the kitchen or at a barbecue  
I am sure that grilling makes the meat more tasty
and it's certainly speedier than to cook a stew
if ever you want to make a meal that's hasty.

A gentle grilling will remove much of the fat,
depositing the drippings in the pan below  
and your health can only benefit from that
by making the advent of a heart attack more slow.

But there is one drawback to this excellent plan:
here you'll find my complaining growing shriller;
for though I am a domesticated man,

I do not want to wash the bloody griller.

Reviews
amen!
Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 28th April 2008
reminds me of the kids' joke: 
 
How does a chimpanzee make toast? 
He puts it under the gorilla.

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 28th April 2008
I think the fact that you don't wash it, adds to the flavour, though as you point out, probably not the health benefits. 

Written by Veronica_Milvus (769 comments posted) 28th April 2008
From the sublime ("Sisters Converse") to the... domestic! With such mundane concerns is the poets life encumbered. Would that we only fed on the ambrosia of the Gods, which is our right! 
 
Throw another shrimp on the barbie, Brian!

Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 28th April 2008
Sometimes poems about the most mundane things can be extremely well written. This one certainly's got style. 
 

Written by Phil (7014 comments posted) 28th April 2008
A BBQ grill is even worse than usual. With you all the way - though I couldn't have expressed it like this. 
 
Phil

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 29th April 2008
I totally agree with every line, especially the last. My hubby LOVES BBQ grill! I tell him, unless he is going to clean it afterwards, we are not using it. 
 
Mia :grin

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