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The Grumbly Man

By Katanga

28 April 2008

Josie's been politely urging me to get my Iambic Pentameters act together, since my attempts at rythmical meter leave much to be desired.

So here's my first go at it - a Shakespearian sonnet for children consisting wholly of the self-same I.Ps.

Hope it works, Josie? Ho! Ho!

The Grumbly Man

The Grumbly Man came home from work one day
And grumbled on and on about his job
"I can't survive on such low weekly pay!"
He shook his fist and then began to sob.
"There's nothing in the house for me to eat -
No eggs, no bread, no cream, no cheese, no ham -
I'll have to rob a bank to buy some meat!
A failure through and through is what I am!"
Then slowly he composed himself and thought
'Man cannot live on meat alone and so
I'll sing a happy song that I was taught.'
He sang and sang and even cried "Ho! Ho!"
But nothing filled his empty cooking pot,
Which serves him right for grumbling, does it not?

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Written by Josie (2732 comments posted) 28th April 2008

My husband, Mike, will tell you that for the first time ever in my life I am completely SPEECHLESS! ha ha

hahaha
Written by SplatterpunkShelbs (37 comments posted) 28th April 2008

I love it! Respect to you for being able to write a sonnet! I had to write one for english class last week and I almost cried. Free verse all the way for me! but seriously, good job!

Thanks Guys!
Written by Katanga (1163 comments posted) 28th April 2008

Josie - speechless in awe or in horror? I hope the former, but suspect the latter . . . Ho! Ho! Mike must be a tolerant sort of chap - respect! X

Shelby - you gladden my heart! I tell you what, though . . . writing to a prescribed meter or form can seriously damage your health (please see my attempts at a 'villanelle' and a 'paradelle' - Streuth!).

I love your so-far-two poems and so-far-two short stories so much, I would hate to think of you trying to write within the fetters of any fixed form.

I mean it!

Keep them coming Splatterspunk! Sorry! (Well, you asked for it! Ho!)

Thanks again! John X

Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 29th April 2008

Nice poem! I think I can sense some Josie-inspiration, but it's an original piece and very well written. If someone can write something that reads so sponteneously and naturally and meanwhile apply a formal rhyme scheme, that's certainly impressive.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3298 comments posted) 29th April 2008

A great little bit of doggerel. The rhythm and rhyme made it an easy read and perfect for children and I'm sure they would love the slightly subversive edge to it. I thought there was a bit of Saki about it and that is hight praise indeed.
jane

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