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By shirley_keeldar
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29 April 2008 |
Revised!
You like me blonde
smiling and in bed;
cute, you said.
Fake hair, fake face
You speak words of
adoration;only lies
come out my mouth.
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Point of view
Written by patterjack (1202 comments posted) 28th April 2008 | It seems to switch around a bit , even in this short piece
Epigrammatic
Fake hair -- hmm, it should not but it does conjure up in me the thought of a wig . That in turn leads to ..... but you don't want to follow my mind into that dark passage 
patterjack | Fake hair
Written by shirley_keeldar (67 comments posted) 28th April 2008 | Blonde is rarely natural in Scotland hee hee!
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ps I see what you mean by point of view switching... hadn't noticed, but it seems obvious now oops! |
Written by Fledermaus (3325 comments posted) 28th April 2008 | Nice idea.
Funny how so many people dye their hair blonde, while some of the natural blondes I know dye their hair red or black |
Written by Phil (6738 comments posted) 29th April 2008 | I quite like the way this turns. It's pretty cold - I don't know if you mean it - but I find it slightly comic too.
Enjoyed.
Phil | brrr!
Written by shirley_keeldar (67 comments posted) 1st May 2008 | yeah it is cold! Didnt mean it but feel it! I dont know about comic, can you elaborate?
Thanks!
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