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By Magpie
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20 November 2005 |
Don't ask a man His reason for the life he leads He'll make it up, a forgery He'll take it for a challenge To his right to be. Why hope for reason, we Who are just flesh Unruly neurons, sharing Pulses Of Electricity? Massively parallel, All at once They fire in patterns of association Here to there to over there And round again. There's no reason In a million pulses Of Electricity. Just chaos formed After the fact Into order, like a dream. |
Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 22nd November 2005 | | Very didactic. | Thanks for the review Written by Magpie (11 comments posted) 24th November 2005 | I would have said argumentative rather than didactic, but I know what you mean. Did that put you off? | Written by no1butClo (336 comments posted) 7th May 2006 | This is a simple, questioning piece, and i think the style of the last stanza is perfect. If you could tease that tone out of some of the earlier verses the subject matter could hit home alot harder. The first few lines hold some brilliant ideas, the whole thing has great potential keep going x clo x |
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