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Poetry
Reason
By Magpie
20 November 2005

Don't ask a man
His reason for the life he leads
He'll make it up, a forgery
He'll take it for a challenge
To his right to be.

Why hope for reason, we
Who are just flesh
Unruly neurons, sharing
Pulses
Of Electricity?

Massively parallel,
All at once
They fire in patterns of association
Here to there to over there
And round again.

There's no reason
In a million pulses
Of Electricity.

Just chaos formed
After the fact
Into order, like a dream.

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Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 22nd November 2005
Very didactic.
Thanks for the review
Written by Magpie (11 comments posted) 24th November 2005
I would have said argumentative rather than didactic, but I know what you mean. 
 
Did that put you off?

Written by no1butClo (336 comments posted) 7th May 2006
This is a simple, questioning piece, and i think the style of the last stanza is perfect. If you could tease that tone out of some of the earlier verses the subject matter could hit home alot harder.  
 
The first few lines hold some brilliant ideas, the whole thing has great potential 
 
keep going :) 
 
x clo x

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