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Tissue please
By mightymoose
29 April 2008

Can you tell I am bothered?


ah! ah! ahhh chou!
Oh no! The snot just flew!
Do you need a tissue too?

Dark circles under my eyes
are tell-tale signs of my demise.
Cursed pollen! Through the air it flies.

itch! itch! itch! bitch!
scritch, scritch, scritch itch!
Allergy meds? Pitch! Pitch!


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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 29th April 2008
Liked the first two lines and the middle verse. For me, it perhaps needs a little more 'joining together.' 
 
Phil

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