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The Ballad of Delilah
By Veronica_Milvus
29 April 2008
This is pretty much a True Story, apart from that the fact her name was not Delilah.  She also had amazing legs, but that would complicate the story.

THE BALLAD OF DELILAH

 

Delilah’s long hair was her beauty and prize,

a tawny and sensual mane.

Thick, strong and wavy, it fell to her thighs

and drove her admirers insane.

 

The boys in her college would turn round and stare

at its lustrous and tumbling grace.

Wistful, they noted her “just-rogered” air

as she tossed the stray strands from her face.

 

For the rowing club fours, sweet Delilah would cox.

Their oars and their hearts were a-quiver!

And lush, down her back, there were always those locks!

A torrent to rival the river.

 

Delilah soon married a rowing club boy;

at the wedding, no veil falsely modest.

Her pre-Raphaelite tresses, in lamplight, a joy

and adornment enough for a goddess.

 

When her husband was posted to tropical shores

Delilah was posted as well,

but the climate there made the long hair such a chore!

So lank, and as sweaty as hell.

 

Breaking point came for Delilah one day

When she proudly became a new mother

She took hold of her tresses and sheared them away

declaring “It’s all too much bother”.

 

The next thing we knew, when the couple came home

she moved in with her parents, and son.

Her husband was living in London, alone

and their marriage was over and done.

 

The charms of Delilah were suddenly weak,

and this is the point of my story;

discover the feature that makes you unique

and cherish your own crowning glory.

Reviews
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 29th April 2008
I can heartily agree with the point you make in the last verse but I do have my doubts about the example you give in the poem. Hope I'm not missing any subtle irony here. I do suffer from an irony deficiency,the tablets are helping. [there should be a grinning smilie her but I can't b****y do them]  
Still it was an easy read with a nice bouncy rhythm, My sort of verse. 
cheers 
Jane

Written by Brett (1008 comments posted) 29th April 2008
I like this, V. 
 
"A torrent to rival the river."  
 
And your reference to her pre-Raphaelite tresses. Nice solid ballad. 
 
Cheers

Written by Brett (1008 comments posted) 29th April 2008
Let's hear about her legs!

Written by Veronica_Milvus (769 comments posted) 29th April 2008
I am really not the right person to comment on her legs! But I am happy to report that there is some justice in the world, as she is pretty much flat chested.

Written by Veronica_Milvus (769 comments posted) 29th April 2008
BBS - the last verse was just a way of tidying up the (split)ends really. No great moral message! She did look very ordinary without all that hair, though.

Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 29th April 2008
Nice one. Delilah seems a suitable name for a person shaving off hair. However much women may dislike it, looks matter a lot for men (and probably for women too).
Brilliant!
Written by Katanga (1552 comments posted) 29th April 2008
Veronica, I am more enthusiastic about this than the reviews above - I'm gob-smacked! 
 
I relish 'her "just-rogered" air' . . . 
 
My father's name was Roger and I named a two-seater kit car after him in honour of naughty jolliness! 
 
'Rogering' is one of my favourite words, along with 'jolliness' - remember the apochryphal (?) 'Roger the cabin boy' from Captain Pugwash? 
 
Anyway, all that aside, I think that you've given everybody yet another stonker of a poem! 
 
Cheers! John X
Poor female
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 29th April 2008
A Samson tale in reverse ! 
 
You have a great metrical /rhythmical control -- and some top line metaphors -- not weakened as would be by a simile instead. 
 
I will message about another lady's hair . 
 
patterjack
My, my, my Delilah
Written by edjones (14 comments posted) 30th April 2008
I'm with Katanga in that my appreciation is unreserved. 
Great ballad
Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 30th April 2008
Although I heartily agree with the principle, for me it was the other way around (oo-er, missus) - my husband-to-be didn't notice me when I had tresses to my waist, but pricked up his ears (if you'll pardon the expression) when I had the locks cropped.

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 30th April 2008
I'm imagining her coxing the rowing club fours in all her about to be rogered glory.  
 
So, thanks for that image.

Written by Phil (7013 comments posted) 30th April 2008
Enjoyed this. 
 
Wistful, they noted her “just-rogered” air 
Class. 
 
I did expect this to go down a much more risqué route after reading the first couple of verses. Still enjoyed. 
 
Phil

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 30th April 2008
There is something about women and long hair. I personally think any women with waist-length hair, pretty or otherwise, will draw people's attention and provoke their curiosity. I think all that hair makes a woman feel attractive, too, which is a healthy thing. (That's it. I'm growing my hair now.) 
 
Mia :grin

Written by Veronica_Milvus (769 comments posted) 30th April 2008
You and me both, Mia!

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