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The Last Time
By msebastian08
30 April 2008

In darkness then, the moaning wind

Pulsed rain across the window glass.

Your sobs, a sad echo, threw mad

Contortions through your face.

 

Murmuring comfort words,

I held your head to me.

Your hands clasping my arm

I kissed your tears.

And then we clung on,

Bodies now commanding,

Embracing passion: insistent,

Urgent, desperate, final.

Exhausted, longing, hoping,

Rest at last, peace. And your face

Now calm, an angel’s rest.

And at first light you were gone.

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Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 30th April 2008
The first stanza, I found, very powerful. I found this line "threw mad / Contortions through your face." particularly gripping. Because of the reference to window glass and the storm outside, I imagined the flashes of lightening through the wildly shaking trees, flickering across the woman's face, contorting it. It was a powerful image (not sure if you intended it that way) of almost manic desperation and pathos. 
 
The second stanza read like an old movie scene, depicting desperate forbidden love and broken heart that will never heal... Powerful, romantic, intense.  
 
Mia 8)

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