Great Writing - Home > Poetry > Violet Friendship
READING ROOM
Great Writing - Home
Read and review others' work
Articles on writing
Advice from the community
COMMUNITY
Talk to others in the forums
Events and Competitions
GW News
ABOUT GREAT WRITING
All About Us
Contact Us
WORK AWAITING REVIEW
GW IS...
Great Writing creative writing community is designed to prompt ideas and provide inspiration and motivation within aspiring and amateur authors. Whatever your topic; from love poetry to Doctor Who or Harry Potter fan fiction, Great Writing's online writing group is where you can make new friends and improve your creative writing.
WHO'S ONLINE
We have 1054 guests online and 4 members online
Poetry
Violet Friendship
By Katanga
05 May 2008

For Violet, who has been very kind to me.

Tongue-in-cheek? Yes! Exclusively male? No!

Intended as a light spoof of 'Love is . . .' cards and of Kahlil Gibran's 'The Prophet'.

It's longish, so I thought it suitable for bonk holiday Monday . . .

Comments? Yes please!

Cheers!

John X


Friendship is…

   

 To cruelly mock your friend
 Without mercy
 To achieve only a deepening of forgiveness
 To take him from behind
 When he is least expecting it
 And to return his smile
 When he turns round

 To confront your friend
 In the early morn
 With the mother
 Of all hangovers
 And laugh together

 To open the curtains of self-pity
 Invite him in without embarrassment
 And then go forth
 To wallow willingly in his


 To gently mock the shallowness of others
 Without condemnation
 But rather with the tender love
 That comes through
 The mutual mental masturbation
 Of casual gossip which
 In its turn
 Deepens the special spirit
 Of Friendship


 To ridicule false dignity and
 To fart
 To love literature and
 Discuss art
 To know that whatever you say
 You will always be part
 Of the dance
 Between friends

 To know that he also
 Has staggered through the ruins
 Of his could-have-beens
 Has faltered at the door
 Of Hope
 Has loved people
 For no other reason
 Than the need to love
 Has stumbled through the rubble
 Of the house of Love
 But to know that he
 Will take your hand
 And guide you through
 The earthquake
 In your soul

 To talk wistfully
 Of other possible past lives
 Of what might have been
 But without sadness
 Rather with the joy
 Of sharing licentious regret

 To hate him for the worst parts in you
 Which he reflects
 To love him for the lost parts in you
 Which he connects

 To wake cursing at the dawn but
 To find your bitterness refreshed
 By the thought that he too
 Is getting dressed
 Pouring scorn at the mirror
 And then milk on cornflakes

 To lay at his door an offering
 Through which the giving is a pittance
 The sharing priceless
 For your friend’s thought does not count
 The cost
 It embraces a whole which is
 Indivisible

 To love another in heart and mind
 But to keep your friend in spirit
 And to know
 That he can never be replaced
 To grieve at his leaving
 But to rejoice at his living
 In your heart

 To know that one day
 Even when all our days are done
 He will return
 Only then will we be wise enough
 To dance together
 In the twilight
 Or the dawn
 Without regret

 To wait with him for your
 Twin hearts’ melody
 To sing in harmony
 To the beat of the World’s pulse

 

 To ask him a question
 To which the answer
 Does not matter
 Only the look upon his face
 That reflects your doubt
 About the things that do

 To hear a song together
 And not discuss it later
 Only know that far below
 Beneath words
 Your roots have been disturbed

 To sleep between your loved one
 And him
 Knowing that his lust knows
 No limit
 And to know that
 His is as yours
 Without jealousy
 But with mirth

 To throw your arm
 Over him
 In the fitfulness
 Of dreams
 And to know that
 He won’t notice
 Or if he does that
 Forgiveness comes easy
 As the leaf
 Falls from the tree

 

 But one thing I would
 Say to you:
 Never betray your friend
 For in betraying him
 You betray your innermost spirit
 And which of us would be
 A traitor to life?


To write him down
 Your thoughts in verse
 For want of better
 Or of worse
 To, like a banana less its skin,
 Show him all that lies within
 To know the truth
 For what it’s worth
 Of all that rests between you
 And the Heavens
 And the Earth

 

 To return from holiday and know
 That back to work you have to go
 Mundanity rears her ugly head
 She makes you want to stay in bed
 With the one you love and love to squeeze
 Aaah! Visions of a life of ease!
 But beckoning from an alien door
 “Come on, my friend, there’s something more!”
 Someone’s busting, needing you
 Your friend is lonely, begging you
 To embrace him with your solitude
 Confront him naked in the nude
 And tell him now of things undone
 Of nipples burning in the sun
 Of feelings felt and music’s sound
 Of lovers lost and strangers found
 And empathy

 To nod, perchance to wink
 At half-formed plans
 Never to be realised
 But always to be relished

 I beg you to remember this
 The under-aged will soon be old
 But you my friend are cherished!


Reviews
Lovely
Written by meadowcroft1964 (112 comments posted) 5th May 2008
Katanga 
I thought this poem lovely don't quite understand it all I hope this time what I do understand is correct because if so you hold me in higher esteem than I do myself. I also take on board the message not to close the door on friendship when its being offered (that was part of the message I hope I'm not embarrassing myself). 
I have never read the "Prophet " but intend to get my hands on a copy. My writing weather good or bad comes from the heart which sometimes makes me re-act without due thought. Please tell me if I am wrong in my interpretation. Violet  
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
?
Written by wt (137 comments posted) 5th May 2008
Sorry John did you say that Khalil Gibran was exposed as a charlatan and fraud and where did you get that impression? 
 
As far as the work is concerned, like I said earlier, try a stanza or two for starters. 
 
 
Intro Amended
Written by Katanga (1497 comments posted) 5th May 2008
 
Violet - yes, you get my meaning loud and and clear. I mean it as an affirmation of the power and value of friendship and definitlely a message, as you put it, 'not to close the door when it is offered'. Thank you! 
 
As for 'The Prophet' - Yes, I highly recommend it. 
 
wt - Interesting. I know I read a whole expose of him years ago, but it must have been from a dodgy source. I've just trawled the internet and can find no hint of it. 
 
I've taken out the slur in my intro, and spelt his name right. Thanks!

Written by Phil (6951 comments posted) 5th May 2008
Not sure what to make of this. It doesn't rhyme, then it does. It has little rhythm then it bounces along. Not a crit as such - just a little unsure how to 'look' at it. If written for a specific person that would explain a lot. There are some very good ideas - touching in places.  
 
Thought it could do with compressing a little - but I did like its partially narrative nature. 
 
A mixed review, I guess - but I'm a little mixed up! 
 
Phil
Specific Person?
Written by Katanga (1497 comments posted) 5th May 2008
 
Phil - thanks for taking the time to wade through this. I do ramble on a bit! 
 
Yes, it is written for a specific person, but I hope that much of it can strike a universal chord? On reflection, I think I should compress, as you suggest, by cutting out the rather obscurely specific personal stuff . . . 
 
The chaos of rhyme and rythm is supposed to reflect the sometimes chaotically rocky road of a long friendship (I say pretentiously, to excuse my lack of discipline - Ha!). 
 
It's back to the Stephen Fry for me - the above effort was written before you guys pointed me in his direction! 
 
Thoroughly enjoying him, BTW . . . 
 
Cheers! John (looking forward to David V)

   Only registered users can rate and write comments.
   Please login or register.

Powered by AkoComment 2.0!

 Previous item   Next item