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Through a Window
By Katanga
06 May 2008
Through a glass darkly?

Dunno!

Rock 'n' Roll!

Cheers!

John X



Through a Window

 

Tonight I longed through a window

To see you once again

But there was too much love lost

Mist on our window pane

 

How will you be my sometime Love

When all our loves are gone

Gone gone to an always place

While we keep bleeding on

 

Nightmares will haunt our future

Sweet dreams our past

I’ll be a distant memory

We could never ever last

 

One hundred pills in the bottle

That we can always take

A car to drive at full throttle

Without ever applying the brake

 

Comb your hair and do your face

Grimace in the mirror

Pull the blankets up to your chin

Shake and weep and shiver

 

Dream dream dream on my Love

Never wake to think

Of what’s to come tomorrow

It’s written in black ink

 

So where are all our yesterdays

They’ll never disappear

Most of them are with me now

Tonight at home right here

 

And when your memories fade and dim

Remember that in your heart

I have claimed my lonely place

We will never be apart

 

Tonight I looked

Through a window pane

I saw you in tears

In the dark in the rain

 

I smashed my fist

Right through the glass

Into a raging wind

And I thought I saw you again

Reviews
I LOVE this one!
Written by SplatterpunkShelbs (37 comments posted) 5th May 2008
the last stanza is my favorite. It all seems so calm until then, but you can feel the tension building up. I'm used to judging visual art, so don't make fun of me, but I think this poem actually gives the reader a sense of motion. You get what I mean? 
 
~Shelby

Written by Phil (6685 comments posted) 6th May 2008
This reads a little more like lyrics than straight poetry. Your intention? 
 
Phil
Lyrics?
Written by Katanga (1182 comments posted) 9th May 2008
 
Shelby - thanks for a great review! I certainly won't make fun of you - I think you write brilliantly yourself and I must catch up with your latest postings. I thing I get what you mean about 'motion', but my own visual art awareness is very limited. 
 
Phil - interesting point you make here! Actually, I was not consciously thinking 'lyrics' when I wrote this. 
 
Is it 'Dream dream dream' by Freddie and the Dreamers, or whoever? 
 
Cheers anyway! 
 
John

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