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Shopping Day
By awakenedmind
07 May 2008
I have read the comments made on my previous work, and (honestly) takne them on board. I acknowledge and accept that I have a lot of work to do on the 'nuts & bolts' of writing.
But I still love writing, when an idea comes into my head it just feels good to get it down onto cyber paper!
So apologies for the 'nuts & bolts' critique is still expected, how else am I to learn whilst I delve into yet another bookshop at the weekend!

awakenedmind
aka
Michael

Shopping day today

I could go to the supermarket and just get it all over and done with, or, I could go downtown to the open market and shops.

Go to the supermarket and get it all over and done with

Go downtown and be able to actually speak to the stall holders – even if it is some ‘cheeky’ comment.

If I went to the supermarket I could get back home and do things I actually want to do!

What do I actually want to do?

So I’ll go downtown, meet and talk to people perhaps have a coffee!

But everything cost so much. And I’ve got to cart everything around with me instead of using a trolley!

But I would get out and see some people from here, rather than the supermarket where there are people I don’t know and have never seen

It’s a dilemma.

I have lots of time on my hands so I’ll go downtown

Buses are running to timetables when people don’t want to use them so I’ll have to use the car.

I remember a nice little car park just next to the open market I’ll go there

£2-50 an hour, you must be joking! I drive around a bit more.

Disc Parking only, I don’t have a disk! I drive around a bit more

Parking meter, and a space, I drive in, check the meter, £2 per hour, no change, I drive around a bit more.

Ah a multi-storey car park, pay on exit, looking good I go in, get my ticket and realise how much it is, £2-50 per hour, too late now, I drive in. round and round, up and up, third floor a space!

Why is it the bigger the car the more spaces they have to try and cover with their car, anyway I squeeze in.

Lifts not working so down the stairs. At least it’s not far to the shops.

I wander around and smell the earthy vegetables, the tang and zest of fruit and a sharp almost heady smell of spices. I walk around further and see clothes stalls next to book stalls next to food stalls next to well the list goes on and on.

A café has located itself in the centre of the stalls, everyone sitting there seems happy and chatting away, the stall holders shout their orders over and have a ‘banter’ with the people having their coffee.

It feels like being at home.

I get my veg, meat, some fruit – oh and a nice cardigan, a book for him indoors – well he always saying he has nothing to read. There was a nice pattern in the haberdashery and I saw an old neighbour I used to go to school with so we went and had a coffee.

Things have changed so much since we left school, our own children now have left school, we chat about what they were doing and then – we chatted about what we had done. It didn’t take long.

We said our goodbyes, and we would have to do it again, as it was really nice to meet up after all these years. All these years.

Gathering my three shopping bags, which seemed heavier than before the coffee I set off. I wonder what is around the far side of them market, I didn’t go in there before.

Kitchen implements, I need another washing basket but it is too big to carry, I’ll bring him with me next time. Walking further down I see a ‘nick-nack’ shop, little trinkets, nothing expensive but all looked – well – nice. Further along and there is a pet stall, lots of little furry things and flapping things, bags of straw and wood shavings, even bigger bags of dog food, the smell was – different –

Looking at my watch I had been almost three hours, £7-50 – I dash back to the multi-storey car park, I think that perhaps this wasn’t such a good idea, lift still not working, these bags are really getting heavy as I go up the stairs.

Made it, placing the items in the boot, I take my coat off and sit down, I want to take my shoes off but I think of £7-50 and drive away. Winding down the window the man in the little booth reaches out for my ticket, handing it over I watch as he enters it into a machine, £3-50 please, why is it I can never find my purse when I need it, I hand over the money thinking I should query the amount, but my feet ache so I don’t.

Now at home, mid afternoon, shopping put away and feet in nice comfy slippers I think about my friend and our coffee and what we had done.

My mind was a blank, and then it hit me. I had three wonderful well-balanced kids who were now making there own way in life. I had a (sometimes) -wonderful husband, I have a nice house – and garden, we didn’t have money to ‘spare’ but there isn’t anything else I ‘really’ want.

In that moment I realised that happiness wasn’t achieved in material things but in a realisation of what contentment really was.

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 8th May 2008
Well I'm surprised that a trip to the shops can bring about such a zen like such of realised contentment. I usually want to de-bowel the cat with a spatula after a day in town.  
I must admit I prefer the market but all too often opt for the supermarket [which is nearer] out of laziness. 
I enjoyed the piece especially the internal dialogue, that was a nice touch and the meeting with your friend added a bit of depth to it. 
Well executed and about the right length 
cheers 
jane
Nice Read
Written by beatricelouise (215 comments posted) 10th May 2008
You made the day so interesting. You brought your feelings and thoughts out so well. I liked how you ended your story. With a bit of a moral. Life is not about accumulating things, but your relationships.  
 
I think too, that doing this type of unplanned outing can be sometimes more fun than a hasty run to the supermarket.  
 
The not being able to find what you want in your purse is so me. I can relate to that somewhat rediculous situation. :sigh

Written by Leigh (254 comments posted) 29th May 2008
A very nice story, which took a mundane scenario and lifted it out of the ordinary. I could really identify with the whole finding somewhere to park, finding change, finding your purse palarva. 
 
I liked your conclusion too. Your narrator sounds like a very happy person grateful for her lot in life. 
 
I just spotted a typo in the penultimate para: should be "their" own way in life, not "there."

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