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Distant Remembrance
By Veronica_Milvus
08 May 2008
Another true story.

DISTANT REMEMBRANCE

All sunny smiles, and jokes, and tan, and twenties
the Kiwi working in our labs told me
that he, and a bunch of mates, had spent the week
on holiday in Turkey.  When I laughed
imagining the beer, and foreign girls
in insubstantial clothes, he shook his head
and said they’d visited Gallipoli.

Each of them had relatives who died
great-grandfathers, great-uncles for the most.
Though no-one now alive remembers them
there were letters, photos, medals, memories.
He said, they felt they knew them well enough;
the sunny boys with smiles and tans and jokes
who never left their twenties. Then he smiled.
There was, in fact, some beer involved, he said.

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Written by Brett (486 comments posted) 8th May 2008
Enjoyed this very much, V. It flows effortlessly, like a monologue. A clever, and poignant, repitition of 'sunny', 
'smiles', 'tans' and 'jokes' and to be followed by 'who never left their twenties.' 
 
Wonderful. 
 
Cheers
Sunny Boys!
Written by Katanga (729 comments posted) 8th May 2008
Oh, yes! You've done it again, Veronica! How come you never post a lousy piece like most of the rest of us?! 
 
Thoroughly agree with Brett above - 'sunny smiles' to 'sunny boys' is well . . . I gape! Echoes of a song line I seem to remember: 
 
"Oh sonny boy, the Ode to Melancholy!" or is it 'Danny boy'?! Ha! Anyway, it rings a good bell for me. 
 
True, you say - what a classic case of putting your proverbial foot in it by laughing inappropriately! We've all done that, which gives your poem universal appeal. 
 
The resolve at the end . . . What relief, and what heart-rending pathos + bathos. 
 
Wow! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by Josie (2500 comments posted) 8th May 2008
I think they did a lovely thing in going there, just to get the feel to a certain extent of where there relatives had fought. I ought to do that for my father was a prisoner of war in Crossen on the Oder. It would be interesting to visit the place I've seen on old postcards. Too many lives killed needlessly by man's stupid fighting in this world I'm afraid.

Written by mia_ms_kim (891 comments posted) 8th May 2008
This poem reminds me of the Korean war (50's) when the westerners came and fought for South. If they didn't come, there would be no South Korea, just North. And that's a scary thought. I think these people who fought for the freedom of another people should be remembered. And what a way to remember them! Well done, VM. 
Mia ;)

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 10th May 2008
Liked this very much - easy flow and rhythm, but given quality by the last three lines. The ideas that shout for attention there really give this another edge. 
 
Phil

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