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...and another

By Alice

23 November 2005

I am in two mind's about this particular piece of work. It came to me after reading the headline of one of the British papers. Normally, I tend to shy away from controversy and politics, but I know there has been some debate about this subject, not just in the papers, but elsewhere on this site.

This is my way of expressing a point of view.

My mother went to work today

An ordinary day

She got up late

She had to rush

With little time for me

I watched her from the window, go

A scurry in her walk

Until her footsteps died away

Her face, her smile, her laugh

And Daddy cried all afternoon

He was awful sad

Said Mummy wasn't coming back

From work to tuck me in my bed

He said that Mummy's gone away

Through no fault of her own

To some she was a heroine

But she was still my Father's rock

So now I know before I'm grown

That monsters do exist

Now my world's a darker place

What darker place than this?

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Written by jean.day (2391 comments posted) 23rd November 2005

Interesting idea, writing from the child's point of view. And the child, having seen the mother happy when she left, will find it hard to believe that she didn't want to go and stay away. Very thought provoking.

Written by Iheoma (20 comments posted) 24th November 2005

plenty of unanswered questions

Iheoma :roll

Written by Alice (64 comments posted) 24th November 2005

That's the point.

Well expressed
Written by Bagheera (685 comments posted) 24th November 2005

And at the same time leaves the reader (this one, at least!) asking several questions at the end.
Traffic accident? Casual violent attack? Or was the 'happy, cheerful manner' just a charade: did she deliberately walk out? (Not that I think this is the most likely interpretation, but I got the feeling you deliberately left it ambiguous .... :grin

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Written by Alice (64 comments posted) 24th November 2005

Thanks for your comments Bagheera. I didn't realise there were so many questions left unanswered by this piece. However, the poem itself is open to interpretation. I believe that is the whole point of writing something creatively. As soon as the poem has been read, the interpreter then owns that interpretation. (no right or wrong.)
The important point about the poem is that it was just an ordinary day (again open to one's own interpretation i.e., from the child's point of view it would be ordinary anyway.), but from a general point of view it could be anyone and the day could be any day. The whole poem is based on the fact that the child becomes motherless.
The idea for it did come from the headline of a national newspaper just a couple of days ago if this helps any.

Alice

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