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By meadowcroft1964
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09 May 2008 |
something is watching down in the field
specially written with fell pony in mind
You be mine
I'd make you tow the lin
watching and waiting
binding my time
No matter when
No matter where
I knew how
So
Just bided my time
you'd soon know
where I drew the line
presenting you with treats
Taught you not to retreat
slowly I had to gain your trust
To succeed I knew I must
I watched as you were playing
secret plans I was slyly laying
time had come to do my best
Steal you from your Mother's breast
Now would be where
I was put to the test
You tried to run, jump and thrust
you kicked and. bit and tried to bolt
I could not let you go
See I love you
My beautiful darling colt
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Oh yes!
Written by Katanga (727 comments posted) 8th May 2008 | Is this about your husband? I think so, but if not, please forgive me . . . Cradle snatcher!
Really good, again!
Two small points:
1. Line 6 - 'bind-ed my time'
Better, 'Bided my time'.
2. Line 10 'learned you . . .'
Better 'taught you . . .'
I wouldn't be so picky if I didn't think this was really strong!
Thank you, Violet! No offence, I hope?
Cheers!
John X | KATANGA
Written by meadowcroft1964 (80 comments posted) 8th May 2008 | | I can tell your not a animal lover a colt is a young boy horse .the poem was written about what happens when it time for them to be separated from it's mother. Thou i happen to prefer your interpretation If only. My husband is seven years older than me. We only knew each other three months when we married. It was said we wouldn't last three weeks but it's coming up to our twenty fourth anniversary. I appreciate the corrections not kidding when I state that I am semi illiteret .my teachers were shocked I could even read. | Good on you!
Written by Katanga (727 comments posted) 8th May 2008 | Animal lover - me? No, it's hard in the city, as they say.
'Steal you from your Mother's breast'
- briliant - I still feel my own mother's tug, though she died some 22 years ago! I still feel the pull, and a strange kind of resentment towards anyone who tries to break that bond - I guess that's what you're talking about? Men, eh?
Must sleep now - a bit befuddled - catch up over the weekend I hope?!
Cheers!
John
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Written by mia_ms_kim (891 comments posted) 8th May 2008 | Phew! My mind was thinking terrible things until I got to the last line. Baby animals are so lovely (other than reptiles). They seem just like human babies. I don't really understand love for animals, though I generally like them. I know people who prefer the company of animals to humans - that I find hard to grasp. Hmmm...
Mia  | been there, done that!
Written by fellpony (1507 comments posted) 9th May 2008 | I've bought an unhandled colt myself, years ago. Cleverest and most talented horse I ever had, but as suspicious as hell about strangers - the original Arabian "I only love my family, and you're not them!" attitude. He was a winner, but his attitude got us into trouble when we went out into the world.
You do feel mean taking them from their dams. I thought you caught it all, very simply. | FELL PONY
Written by meadowcroft1964 (80 comments posted) 9th May 2008 | thanks for review
I wrote poem from my husband perspective he the horse man . Yes I do feel he's feels a little bit guilty about separating mother and child. He always spends extra time in with the foal reassuring it and we keep the mother close by so they know each other are still around. Horse dealers have become wary off approaching him in the hope of purchasing one of our foal because they know if he thinks they are bad horsemen he just says no doesn't matter want price offered. he hates it when someone brags that they broke-in a horse in a matter of weeks. He starts from the day they are born. The secret he says is to get it to know whose master without breaking their spirit. |
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