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The Eleven O'clock Club
By Brett
09 May 2008
Where have all the morning drinkers gone?
(not the beardless pool room, school room youth).
Men who know their whisky from their whiskey,
the dapper gents who breakfast on pink gin.
Storytellers, artists, arseholes, bastards.

The first drink of the day shall come alive
regaled by the tallest tales that such men tell
of lovers, horses, fortunes (lost, of course);
the wryness of their smile seen through their glass
becomes such laughter of a scarlet hue.

The ghosts of friends, of barmaids and of ashtrays
now haunt the George and Dragon, Pen-y-Bont,
The Harp, and no reserves to take their place:
No more Alan Birkins, Kevin Kellys.
In death a friend will always seem too young.

The Eleven O'clock Club has now closed its doors.
Its members, literally, a dying breed.

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Written by Veronica_Milvus (286 comments posted) 9th May 2008
By the time I got to the last line of the first stanza I was grinning. But then I'm sitting here with a nice chilled glass of lightly oaked chardonnay. But then, it isn't eleven o'clock. 
 
"laughter of a scarlet hue" was good but I'm afraid I don't know why. 
 
And the George and Dragon - should it not just be The Dragon, bach, in Welsh Wales? St George and his Dragon being a bit Saes for Pen-y-Bont? 
 
They don't make them like that any more. Surprised though that Dylan Thomas does not get an airing.

Written by Brett (275 comments posted) 9th May 2008
V, I'm afraid it is the George and Dragon (a liitle bit of heaven in Wales, with an English landlord! Though the landlady is almost Welsh). 
 
No matter what you or I would like to think, I did not drink with dear Dylan (and not wishing to blow one's own trumpet, and that of those who keep regular company with me) I don't think he could have kept up! 
 
Cheers V

Written by Josie (2163 comments posted) 10th May 2008
Perhaps they're at work Brett, or perhaps queueing at the Department of Employment, digging their gardens, doing their washing - or perhaps thinking what to put in their next poem. Let us know the answer please.
Josie
Written by Brett (275 comments posted) 10th May 2008
The answer is simple - they're dead!

Written by Phil (5986 comments posted) 10th May 2008
Enjoyed this, Brett. A simple kind of epitaph to a way of life and those who lived (live) it. 
 
I've always avoided drinking too early. Not out of any moral stance - it's just that once started I have to keep going or fall asleep. It's so much cheaper starting later in the day. The first pint out of the pipes never tastes so good anyway. 
 
It's not just the drinkers that are dying off - the hostelries that welcome them are falling by the wayside too. Even drinking is becoming homogenised. (Is there such a word?) 
 
Phil

Written by Brett (275 comments posted) 11th May 2008
Phil, I am the same - once I start I've got to keep going, but I have always prefered the early doors and afternoon crowd.  
You're certainly right about the pubs dying. It chills me to the liver to think that the British pub may become a thing of the past. 
 
Cheers

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