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Snuffle snuffle
By patterjack
10 May 2008
Words  that  tell  of  smell and  smelling -- a mere  vocabulary  exercise

Snuffle  Snuffle

Dogs have noses much keener than ours
but they don't go sniffing the fragrant flowers;
they like their odours  pungent and strong
so they can inhale any terrible pong .

How would you like then  to be a young dog
to investigate every tree or  dead log
while looking  for something rich, ripe and rank
that then you could roll in until you stank?

A bone or some meat  that has been long  forgotten
and by now has developed a stench that is rotten
has the taste for a dog that  will  always  entice:
its malodorous taint just gives it more  spice.

But there are many more things one can think of as well
that appeal to the canine's  extreme sense of smell,
for the aroma of  hot meat or some cooking sausage
will send to its nose a most pleasant message!

Now, humans do not have such  sensitive noses
and prefer the soft scent of sweet fragrant roses:
 or they seem to quite like being  found in a room
that is redolent of ladies' delightful perfume.

 
So a dog may surpass Man in matters olfactory,
but Man's noses' functions are quite satisfactory.

Reviews
Good Smell!
Written by Katanga (727 comments posted) 10th May 2008
Great stuff! 
 
Children love pongs and poohs and all things stinky, so I think this would go down very well with them. 
 
They revel in things that adults tend to disapprove of, so the 'subversive' content has great appeal! 
 
The last two lines aret a treat! 
 
Keep 'em coming! 
 
Oh, by the way, please ignore my 'slug' thing - I realise it's truly dreadful and will probably delete it and atart again! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John

Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 10th May 2008
This style of poem is much along the lines of my own poetry, Patterjack, so of course I would like it. But why have you suddenly changed to writing in this way? It is certainly quite a cheerful and an educational poem, but quite different to your normal work. I've been on GW for well over two years, and this sudden change in your style seems odd. Not that I don't think it good, but quite different. If you have changed over to children's poetry, please go and give me the benefit of your advice in a review of my own work. Thanks
More than a mere exercise
Written by ainsel (40 comments posted) 11th May 2008
This one has a true joyfulness about it, and flows beautifully. It's also quite hilarious. Very good, my dear.
Hi, Brian,
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 12th May 2008
Haven't logged on for ages, so was very surprised to see you writing a 'Josie' type poem!!! Were you inspired by her 'touchy-feely' verses? 
 
Not really your style at all but, as always, well written. Are you changing your mind about rhyming? 
 

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