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Poetry
Inspiration
By Veronica_Milvus
11 May 2008
This might need a bit more work - especially the rhymes in the third stanza.

INSPIRATION

The gypsy told me, looking at my palm,
my romantic soul would be my joy and grief;
the gift of the star that I was born beneath.
So poetry binds me like a wishing-charm.

Not from my mother, with her gloom and spite,
with her glass half empty, her horizons low
who only saw the bleakness, not the beauty of snow,
did I inherit poetry, or try to write.

Perhaps from my father – a russet, freckled man
with roots on the edge of Caithness’ harbour strand
Who copied “Flower of Scotland” in his looping hand
And kept a pocket version of the old Khayyam.

But when you and I, love, each took up a pen –
Christ! But we were Romeo and Juliet, then!

Reviews

Written by Josie (2538 comments posted) 11th May 2008
Lovely Veronica. We often think we inherit our qualities from our parents, but not always. Often it comes from within, or, in case of Brett and me, from our muses who whisper in our ears. By the way - what star are you born under. I'm Gemini - a communicator. This is a beautifully constructed poem.

Written by Veronica_Milvus (492 comments posted) 11th May 2008
Just for the record, Josie, I am a Cancerian, although I don't really believe any of that stuff. Which makes me meek, simpering, moody, homeloving, motherly and domestic. Yeah, right. 
 
But it is true that a fortune teller told me I have the most romantic hand she had ever seen. Probably rubbish too, but it gives me a good excuse to be over-emotional.

Written by Brett (527 comments posted) 11th May 2008
A introspective yet thought provoking piece, V. My favourite line: 
 
'And kept a pocket book of old Khayyam.' 
 
The closing couplet also resonates. 
 
Cheers

Written by rilLie (324 comments posted) 11th May 2008
Thought-provoking. I like it. :D Especially like the last couplet. 
Thanks for the good read.
rather more ...
Written by patterjack (1095 comments posted) 11th May 2008
... shall we say poetic in wording and phrasing than your usual . Influence of that Romantic idea perhaps  
 
Sonnets too , tend to do that to one -- e g the strand rhyme 
 
Nice story line !  
 
patterjack

Written by mr_soul (80 comments posted) 12th May 2008
Hello Veronica. Nice poem, I like this. Very thought-provoking and an interesting story behind it. 
Most of all enjoyed the reference to "Flower of Scotland". The Corries were probably my first favourite band, I used to adore them when I was about five or something. And although my musical tastes have changed considerably since then I still really like them. Roy Williamson was a fabulous songwriter. 
Overall though a great read. Well done

Written by Veronica_Milvus (492 comments posted) 12th May 2008
"O flower of Scotland, when will we see your like again 
who fought and died for their wee bit hill and glen...?" 
 
fabulous, isn't it? I sing it when I'm drunk.

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