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Poetry
Love 2
By meadowcroft1964
12 May 2008



Sorry if it get boring. Appriate feedback about layout any surgesses to improve
might combining both love poems work. 




Love isn't demanding
Possessive and void of trust
Love isn't selfish
devious and mean
Love isn't greedy
jealous and full of regret
Love ain't the cross
you have to bare
It's the coronet of roses
wore high in her hair
 

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A non-poetic opinion
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3174 comments posted) 12th May 2008
I should say first I am no poet and find it hard to appreciate the subtleties of poetry, which is why the first six lines didn't do much for me. I can't argue with the sentiments expressed but it is repeating what has been said a hundred times. Perhaps if you could find an original way saying it as you did so vividly in the last four lines. Great use of metaphor and lovely imagery.It's not what you say in poetry but the way you say it. IMHO 
 
I'm waiting for the poets to shoot me down  
jane

Written by mia_ms_kim (915 comments posted) 12th May 2008
I, too, like the last four lines. To me, the first few lines "tell", but the last four lines "show". I'm no poet either, so feel free to ignore me. 
Mia :grin

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