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The Sooty Show V's Predator
By Mr_E_Writer
12 May 2008
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   Click-click-click-click.

   Hummmmmmmmmm.

   "What's that, Sooty? You can't see the predator! Neither can I. Can you see him children?"
   "HE'S BEHIND YOU... HE'S - "
   "Oh dear, children. Sweep has been sliced in half!"
   "Ooh, ooh, Mr Matthew. There are three red dots on my chest!"
   "Don't worry, Sue. I'm sure it's - "
     ZZZZZZZZZZZ. PFFFFFFFFFFF
   "What's that, Sooty? What's black and white and red all over? Sue!! That's not very nice, is it, children?"
   Click-click-click.
   "HE'S BEHIND YOU."
   "Now, children. How can we get rid of that nasty predator? Let's all say Sooty's magic words, shall we? Izzy-wizzy let's get... "
   ZZZZZZZZZZZZZ.
   Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaghhhhhhhhh!!!

   "MATTHEW CORBETT, YOU'RE ONE UGLY MOTHER FU - "

Reviews

Written by criz (28 comments posted) 13th May 2008
Cute and somewhat funny. Don't know the sooty show so parhaps some of the humor is lost on me. I did like the Kids chiming in as to the dangerous preditors movements.

Written by Livinginanattic (454 comments posted) 13th May 2008
I vaguely remember Sooty and Sweep from my distant childhood. Enjoyed the humour, loved the way you wrote the sound effects.

Written by Mr_E_Writer (129 comments posted) 14th May 2008
Predator Vs. Bender Bending Rodriguez 
Written by Levi (31 comments posted) 14th May 2008  
 
"Clik-clik-clik-clik."  
 
"Bite my shiny metal ass!"  
 
"ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ!"  
 
"Kerching - Boing - Spering!!!!!""  
 
...  
 
Maybe I'm missing something. Or maybe there isn't actually anything to miss. Such as context, as criz succinctly pointed out. Copy and paste this comment for the Sooty one, too.  

Written by Mr_E_Writer (129 comments posted) 14th May 2008
Criz, it appears that I may have 'done it' for you with this one. 
 
Best, 
Eric.

Written by Mr_E_Writer (129 comments posted) 14th May 2008
Dear Mr Living, thank you for your comments. 
I must admit that I do pride myself on my ability to write quality sound effects and you will find that I have used them to great effect in my ongoing series No1's Heroes. 
Cheers, I'm out of here. ZZZZZIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIPP. 
 
Eric (Soundly Affected).

Written by Mr_E_Writer (129 comments posted) 14th May 2008
Levi, 2 reviews for the price of 1, re-spek geezer. 
 
Cheers, 
 
Lee Cooper (Stone washed).

Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 14th May 2008
Much better than #1 - if they are related that is. 
 
This had a little context, but if you're going to deliver more than a simple gag, it needs a bit more development. I like the situation - especially as Sue and Sooty cop for it - never could stand the furry little bastards - even when I was a kid. For me, it needs milking a little more with even more OTT humour. 
 
Phil

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