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System Hijack

By Livinginanattic

12 May 2008

Recently I had to remove some spyware from my computer and came across a lot of jargon in the process. Some of it looked good for a poem.

System hijack,
Walls have ears.
Hear my business
Loud and clear.
Backdoor Agent
Read my files.
Spybots and malware
Waste my time.

Bug my mobile,
Read my e-mails,
Steal my passwords,
Gather details.

Infiltration,
Raise the alarm!
Keep my software
Free from harm.
Place those worms
In quarantine,
Make the system
Fast and clean.

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Written by Phil (6628 comments posted) 12th May 2008

God knows what lurks on our hard drives.

Interesting piece. Is this one of those things they call 'found poems'?

Phil

Written by Livinginanattic (456 comments posted) 12th May 2008

Thanks Phil.

Had to look up 'found poems'. Seems they are made from prose chopped up and rearranged, a bit like a poetic version of collage. I didn't create this that way but it sounds like fun.

Cheers,
Ben

Written by Josie (2718 comments posted) 12th May 2008

I liked the rhythm in your poem Ben. Only a couple of times did I think you have put in a word that spoils it: "Gather details" better. Take out "my". Also "Raise alarm" (take out the "the"). Other than that I thought you did an excellent job and on a rather unusual subject. Well done!

Written by Livinginanattic (456 comments posted) 13th May 2008

Thanks Josie. I like your first suggestion and have amended the poem accordingly. Not so sure about 'Raise alarm'. It doesn't sound quite natural, it's not something I'd say, so I've left it but I've changed 'the' to 'my' in the next line to avoid the word repetition.

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