This was started off by Daphne ...
Dad is feeling rather queer;
he’s been imbibing too much beer.
He’s down in the coal cellar
supping Stella.
Grandad’s jokes are very frisky –
they have punchlines that are risky.
He’s keeping the Napoleon brandy
handy.
Granny starts to sing and shout
until she spits her dentures out.
What’s she drunk to get so merry?
Sherry.
Sis has fallen off her chair,
with daisies plaited round her hair.
She says she smoked some grass –
silly ass.
Brother’s showing attitude,
done a war dance in the nude.
I’ve no idea what he’s chewed
or brewed!
But my life’s just as it should be.
Mum is drinking a herbal tea
sitting in a tree
with me.
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Written by Mr_E_Writer (226 comments posted) 12th May 2008 |
A lovely bit of attitude from bro'
Enjoyed
Eric 'clapton' Wright |
Written by Phil (7014 comments posted) 12th May 2008 |
Fun piece. Enjoyed.
Granny tries to sing and shout
Until her teeth come flying out
What's she drunk to get so merry?
Sherry.
Phil
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Written by Phil (7014 comments posted) 12th May 2008 |
Fun piece. Enjoyed.
Phil
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Written by Phil (7014 comments posted) 12th May 2008 |
| Ooops, thought I'd deleted the first one. Good job it isn't even worse. |
Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 12th May 2008 |
| I'm glad you didn't - I would add the verse to my poem but that would be cheeky. |
Written by Phil (7014 comments posted) 12th May 2008 |
| Feel free. |
Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 12th May 2008 |
Verse three
Came free.
I note that this developed into a sort of clerihew without famous names. Didn't mean it - honest, guv. |
Great Fun, Sue
Written by Brett (1009 comments posted) 12th May 2008 |
Oddly , or perhaps not that oddly, I can picture someone I know in each stanza - even Phil's! Stone me.
Cheers |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 12th May 2008 |
Picture of a dysfunctional family. Liked the grannie and the brother most!
Mia  |
Written by Josie (2854 comments posted) 13th May 2008 |
| Ha ha - Good one Sue. I see Daphne is doing us all a bit of good. Now - I'm off to make a cup of tea - the strong stuff is no good for me - Helps to let the brain flow free - ie - the tea. |
Undirgy!
Written by Katanga (1554 comments posted) 13th May 2008 |
I love this, Sue - delightfully playful and refreshingly undirgy!
Reminds me of when I was 18. I was put in charge of my 90-year-old grandmother for an afternoon in the garden. She suddenly started shouting "Brandy! Brandy!".
I obliged with a tumbler full and was reprimanded fiercely when the adults returned. At five times the recommended dose I had nearly brought her to earlier grave than eventually turned out to be the case!
Josie - I don't like the idea of your 'brain flowing freely'. It conjures up pictures of grey matter escaping from your head and leaving a terrible mess!
Thoughts flow freely, but brains? Please no!
Ha! Ha!
John
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i like the imagery
Written by SplatterpunkShelbs (37 comments posted) 13th May 2008 |
of brains flowing freely. it gives the poem a whole different feel than if he had said "thoughts flowing freely"
good work fellpony |
OTOH
Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 13th May 2008 |
| If anyone can find the word "brains" in my piece, I'd like some of whatever you're having. |
Indeed, Sue.
Written by Brett (1009 comments posted) 13th May 2008 |
| Presumably a pint of...'Brains.' |
Indeed, Brett and Sue.
Written by beatricelouise (215 comments posted) 15th May 2008 |
I liked the whole poem, especially the pint of ...was it brain liquid? Flowing freely? Definitely, a whole different feel...
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Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 16th May 2008 |
| For heaven's sake! review the F***ing poem not the reviews! I did not mention BRAINS in my piece! |
Heaven's Sake!
Written by Katanga (1554 comments posted) 16th May 2008 |
Sue - I apologise and sympathise with your entirely understandable annoyance.
It appears to be my fault!
I only added a small (meant-to-be-humorous) aside to Josie.
Why on earth, let alone in heaven, the above good folk are reviewing my review is totally beyond me!!
A few brain cells gone walkabout?
So, yes, would everyone please get back to fellpony's excellent poem? You can review me elsewhere!
Cheers!
John |
copy ?
Written by Daphnerules (28 comments posted) 16th May 2008 |
you know the bit at the end about herbal tea sitting in a tree did you copy that from me ? becuase in order of who did the poem first ( about herbal tea) I wrote about the herbal tea first !!! have you copied me ?
please post me a message like by message centure or reply to this
i hope you haven't
Daphne  |
Read the intro, Daphne
Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 16th May 2008 |
| - "This was started by Daphne". Acknowledged. It's quite usual for one poem to spark off another on the site - go and read other pieces by Brett, Katanga and Veronica if you don't believe me. This poem is an example of how your herbal tea tale might have been handled another way. |
oh sorry
Written by Daphnerules (28 comments posted) 16th May 2008 |
sorry i didn't read it have you done as i said and have had a look at the actual version? like i said in the intro this is for fellpony and it is only about your idea family drinking heral tea and ending up in places ! Please read it and review it when you read it ! it's called who drank the herbal tea?
Thans Daphnexx  |
lawlz
Written by SplatterpunkShelbs (37 comments posted) 18th May 2008 |
i meant to say thought, in response to Josie...but that still doesnt make much sense. I must have been half asleep, finals are killin me! 
Still, good work fellpony! |
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