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Where are you?
By Oops
26 November 2005
erm....what am i spose to write in here?

Where are You when I stand-alone in the shadows
When the heart breaks and tears fall
When I need Your counsel and guidance
But deafness falls
 
Where are You when the torture returns
When the fear grows and pain beckons
When I need Your comfort and love
But darkness looms
 
Where are You when the world gets too much
When the loneliness takes me
When I need Your companionship and grace
But the sleep of eternal looks too inviting
 
One word is spoken and You are there
To hold me up and mend the broken
To give me strength of You to battle
Forever the protector
Forever the Father

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Thanks, Oops
Written by jean.day (2266 comments posted) 26th November 2005
Beautifully written. I'm glad you got brave and posted this. Having been in several scarey situations myself, I am convinced that prayer can have an impact on the outcome. I can understand where you are coming from - both in the wanting and not getting, and again in the final verse when you feel like you've been heard. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Great Stuff
Written by Rattle_Spear (93 comments posted) 26th November 2005
Loneliness can and does kill. Be strong and fight your demons. 
Then in retrospect, who says you are writing your own feelings of despair? Most people tend to read into others thoughts... 
Great emotions! 
:sigh
just a few
Written by Chaos (14 comments posted) 22nd January 2006
"When the heartbreaks and tears fall": heart breaks? (two words?) 
 
The last line of the third stanza doesn't follow the pattern (I'm being picky, yeah). "But eternity calls"? I dunno.  
 
I general, I like the way this is written -- very simple, eloquent, nothing unnecessary, conveys emotions perfectly. :grin

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