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Poetry
In Pieces
By shirley_keeldar
15 May 2008
Hmm, not sure about this... any suggestions will be warmly welcomed...

I want to be your hero;
Your shiny-toothed superman.

I told you my dreams,
How you are in every part of them,
How I love the bones of you.

I want to hold your hand and
Be the missing part of
The puzzle of you.

I want to be your family
And give you orange juice kisses
Every morning after breakfast.


This is the glue I use
To stick you back together;
Pictures of the way we could be.

How we could live if you didn't
Belong to someone else and
Come to me on loan.
 
You are smiling now
And safe in your little corner,
No need for me.

I fixed you now I
Miss you in bits.

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 16th May 2008
There were some really great line here I particularly liked:- 
"How I love the bones of you". and 
"And give you orange juice kisses" 
There's always a bit of sting in the tail in your work, which is mildly unsettling 
jane
Sting in the Tail
Written by shirley_keeldar (67 comments posted) 17th May 2008
My favourite stories and films are ones with twists at the end and I think that shows in most of my work too! 
 
Thanks for review :)  
 
L x

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