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happy janus
By margarita
15 May 2008

Would love some feed back..have written in a while...perhaps tellingly so!


And although the pace was so  rapid
And used to lazy afternoons and lie-ins
The girl kept up-
charged by some astromic energy-
Getting to work, eating at the table, kissing in secret-
t all seemed quite possible
All the emotional shifts giggled into line
Without any real complaint, no fussy physical ailment.
Some idiosyncratic characteristic stepped up this ambitious test.
A mother, a lover,a sister,a worker a tourist and a tour guide...
All combining, moulding around us like jelly
Cosmically humorous...this tangible universe.

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An Enigma
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 17th May 2008
Hi, Magarita.  
 
I tried to understand this poem, but I was left puzzled. Perhaps you are talking about women's multi-tasking role today? And it's challenges? To me, "All the emotional shifts giggled into line" sounded like the subject was on some drugs that was supposed to help even out her mood swings, but with a side-effect - ie. things appear funny. 
 
I can only guess, but is this about the identity of the woman in confusion and under pressure, or perhaps in a flux? I didn't really get the connection of the woman to the universe, so the title and the last line in particular, were lost on me. Unless again, if she is on some drugs that help her cope, so the universe feels funny to her. Normally a person should not be aware of the universe, tangible or otherwise. 
 
Anyway, that's my best guess. An enigmatic poem. 
 
Mia :roll

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