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Non-Fiction
Look At Me
By ram
17 May 2008
Hello.  I am a new writer.  This is an excerpt from the introduction of my first book.  Please give input.  I have been doing scientific writing for several years. This genre is new to me.
Thank you in advance for your long suffering.
RAM

Introduction: Too Many Eyes Spoil the View

 

When William was young, his favorite insect was the dragonfly.  I remember a vacation on the east coast of Florida where one of these deft creatures landed on William’s nose.   Everybody around him took off.  He walked around for over an hour, face towards the sky, modeling his catch.  There existed a quasi communion between them.  William and the insect were amazingly comfortable, one with the other.  A highly unlikely pair of comrades.   Maybe somehow they had an understanding that each shared the other’s secret, a secret about sight, about vision and perceptions of the world around them. 

 

A dragon fly has huge eyes that bulge out of the sides of its head.  They’re called cluster eyes.  You can’t miss them.  They are both frightening and slightly repulsive to the non-insect lover. They are oriented upward and to the sides so they don’t miss a thing.  These monster apparatus are composed of thousands of six-sided miniscule lenses which are each independent of the other and yet work together to give the insect incredibly detailed perception that can distinguish not only color and brightness, but is able to track electromagnetic waves, minute, almost unperceivable motion, and detect extremely rapid movement.  This is due to the fact that certain zones of the lenses are flattened and can let in huge amounts of light which greatly increases acuity.  The more light that comes into these lenses, the higher resolution of minute details. 

 

This highly precise sight is specially developed for the speed by which the insect travels.

Dragonflies are really fast.  In fact, they are faster than most other insects.  There are very few human beings who can boast about having caught a dragonfly with their bare hands.  They flit around effortlessly darting and swooping and twirling in mid air, zipping back and forth with amazing precision.   Their trajectory is not foreseeable by any mode or means.   Not only can they zip and zoom, but they can also hover in mid air, like a helicopter.  And as if that wasn’t enough, a dragonfly in this static position, can go from zero to top speed in a fraction of a second.  You could never sneak up on one of these little beasts from behind, or from anywhere for that matter.  Couple their speed with their incredible eyesight and you have one formidable adversary for an entity which is lower on the food chain.  

 

A dragonfly’s sight is perfectly adapted to its life in the fast lane.  Its ability to perceive the least detail of movement is key to its capacity to hone in on its prey at high speed.  A dragonfly is able to spot and catch a gnat in mid air at 35 mph because of its ability to see the effects of the movement of the tiny insect in the light patterns.  This is one aspect of reality in at which the dragonfly is expert. 

 

Interestingly enough, as state of the art these blinkers may be they have their limitations.  Although they possess a highly developed ability to see details hardly perceived by other insects, they have surprisingly poor image resolution.   Dragonflies do not see the design of common everyday objects with precision.   To catch the gnat does not necessarily mean to see it.  The dragonfly sees the effects of the gnat and not the form.  In fact, the details of any given image are at best fuzzy.  Life is a blur. 

 

I have spent the last fifteen years of William’s life wondering how accurate the image resolution of the world around him is.  Sure, William possesses an incredibly detailed perception of the world from a scientific point of view.  Even though he was very slow to read and write and painfully behind in communication skills, something in his mind’s eye let in great amounts of information.    He somehow gathered scientific knowledge at an amazing rate.   He could explain the difference between “animal, mineral, vegetable” (a guessing game we used to play at the dinner table) at the age of four.  He could distinguish a female mosquito from a male at the age of five as well as give a mini-lecture on these distinctions.  He is a quick thinker, able to talk circles around his audience when discussing string theory, time warps, co-existing dimensions in time and space, and the notion of infinity, but when it comes to basic image resolution concerning everyday life, well that’s not so clear.  What about watching Sesame Street, going to a neighbor’s birthday party, greeting an acquaintance in a public place, or holding the door for his sister?   Only in the past years has it become evident to me that his image resolution in these areas of the common was blurry.  Maybe William’s perception of the world was too acute, too accurate.  A profusion of detailed information seemed to be constantly inundating his mind and so much so that it was difficult for him to simply accept the common norms of society without giving them a run for their money.

 

Perhaps, like the ability of the eye of a dragonfly to take in light, William’s psyche was able to receive an abundance of information concerning the details of life which skewed his vision of the conventional.

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3141 comments posted) 18th May 2008
I think this shows a lot of potential but as it is I found it a bit confusing. There is a mass of detail, both about the dragonfly and William but not enough context to know what is all about at present. 
I wasn’t too sure what the condition was that William had. I realised you were making an analogy between the dragonfly’s perception and his, but it didn’t help explain his condition clearly. I had a suspicion, and I found from your welcome greeting that your son had Asperger's. I have had a little experience of it from my social work days; otherwise I would not have known what you were describing in that last paragraph. I realise this is only the beginning and is probably explained later but the lack of context in this introduction makes for confusing reading. 
It is an intriguing condition and your analogy is a fascinating one and promises a lot, but you need to orientate the reader in the story fairly quickly to engage them. 
I think you could précis down all that information about the dragonfly or at least break it up by alternating with information about William, which would make it easier to assimilate and help to show up the analogy you are making between the two. 
I thought the parallel was a considered and inspired one and would be happy to read more, but I think you need to beware of making it too abstract and academic. 
I don’t know if you have read “The curious Incident of the Dog in the Night” which is a fictional story about a boy with Apserger’s. From my limited experience I found it quite believable. I thought it handled a difficult subject well. I don’t know what you think of it. 
Anyway, I like your approach and will look out for more 
Cheers 
jane 
 

Written by rui (150 comments posted) 19th May 2008
I had to read up a little bit about Asperger's Syndrome, about which I know nothing - like BBS I had to work out from your welcome message that William had this state of mind. Stating that the comparison is with Asperger's Syndrome would help people to understand it better. 
 
For me, the comparison with the dragonfly's perception worked very well to describe Asperger's Syndrome, and a better description for me than a lot of the information I found on the internet.  

Written by mia_ms_kim (891 comments posted) 19th May 2008
A fascinating read. I didn't find it confusing because I've read up on autism over the years, including many personal accounts. It was a very readable piece on the dragonfly. I knew about the eyes, but didn't know about their image resolution capacity. Just a question - how would anyone know what a dragonfly actually sees? Is it just an educated guess or is it proven and/or provable data? Sorry for being ignorant. 
 
I'm guessing William must be a savant. Whatever is going on in the autistic brain, I've concluded that it must be sensory information overload, the sheer volume of unfiltered data that bombards them every moment, that simply cannot be processed by the human brain. I've heard of autistic persons seeing air molecules with naked eyes, seeing one hair strand like spaghetti noodle, hearing frequencies out of human range, or the ability to conceive complex and detailed blueprint in their mind over night, that would takes several people, and many weeks and volumes of analysis and specification. So they become outstanding painters, scientists, musicians etc. I wouldn't be surprised if many genuises of the past (before we had a name for autism etc) who didn't function well within the social norm, were actually savants. 
 
I was amazed at what the savants can do - superhuman ability. I'm amazed William can discuss string theory! It is one of my life's ambitions to understand the concept just a little bit. 
 
An amazing piece. More information like this should be made available to parents. Autism is on the rise as everyone knows, and it's something every parent fears. We did not vaccinate our child for that reason. 
 
Thank you for sharing this. It couldn't have been very easy. 
 
Mia

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