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Towards Texada
By Emmuttmax
17 May 2008
This is my entry in a small competition. The challenge to write a poem based on a painting.

Toward Texada

Texada sits in moist shimmer
A verdant emerald
A cluster of hills raised in celebration of her homecoming

Her chilled eyes probe the land
From the far side of the lake
Searching for the childhood left behind

She’s been moving towards Texada
The day she moved away
Circular motion, a fool’s errand

A step from the shore, cold memories embrace her ankles
A second step
The familiar touch of chaos grips her mind

With the third step, she is swimming toward Texada
Bold, slow strokes
She pulls the future behind her


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Written by Josie (2533 comments posted) 17th May 2008
For me I can't get used to poems written with all different length lines and no metre, but I know this is popular. I thought you paint a really wonderful picture in words here. I like phrases such as "a cluster of hills raised in celebration of her homecoming" - "she pulls the future behind her". Well done. I hope you win. I've never tried a competition but I know they are popular with poetry writers. For me, with so many different ways of writing, I think it would be trying to judge black from white. I may be wrong.

Written by Emmuttmax (117 comments posted) 18th May 2008
Josie, thanks for the encouragement. As for the different lines and no metre, perhaps that is because I am not a poet. I don't know squat about poetry, but I do like to play with words. :)

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