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The Harvest Mouse - a short story for younger children
By 1211kellie
18 May 2008
Short story derived from poem of same name, any comments good or bad much

appreciated.


Mouse


Roger was a very small and charming harvest mouse.  He lived in a little house that was lined with the softest thistledown and hung suspended within a field of corn.  He had many friends that lived here also, and often you would find them frolicking or sharing picnics of sumptuous berries, insects and seeds.   All in all he was extremely happy here.


One day, when the sun was rising in the morning sky, he heard a distant noise and the ground beneath him began to tremble.  He shivered in fear and proceeded to poke his little nose outside the door, for approaching fast was a monstrous machine with teeth of gleaming steel.  It puffed and squealed, lashing wildly and spewing grain as it ate the corn beneath it.   Poor Roger was now so scared that he leapt down to the ground and moving with such alarming speed, he charged through an opening at the edge of the field and sat with a pounding heart behind a horse chestnut tree.  This heaving giant gyrated relentlessly all day long, eating the corn with such amazing speed, that soon the field was quite empty. 


Then very slowly peace and quiet started to descend once more and little Roger crept out from his hiding place and darted swiftly for the safety of his home.   But sadly he saw that the field was now empty.  There were no tall golden stalks of corn swaying in the breeze; his home also was no more.


Roger was quite a resourceful chap and wasn’t unduly worried.  He would just have to move and find another home to build.  So off he went and soon he found a hedgerow that was laden with glorious rosehips and it was perfect as a second home.  He then set to and built his bed so that he could sleep safe and snug. 


That night, as the moon shone down, Roger fondly thought of all his friends.  He knew that they were still close by and tomorrow morning they would once more frolic in the summer sun.

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Written by Josie (2772 comments posted) 18th May 2008
Oh Kellie - what an absolutely beautiful little story for younger children. Really lovely! It would be so lovely with writing on one page and a picture on the other. I can see Roger as a Beatrice Potter mouse, wearing a pair of dungarees and a little hat with a straw in it - can't you? The children would love this. It's much better as a story. I remember a group of little field mice sitting in our honeysuckle bush having a picnic of the berries. We should have taken a photograph for they didn't seem shy. They had honeysuckle juice running down their little chins. It was so lovely and a true story. I've got a little family of mice in my poem above.

Written by WeeAnn (35 comments posted) 18th May 2008
Josie has said it all. Wonderful!

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