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By Mr_E_Writer
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19 May 2008 |
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I have touched a piece of Heaven, plunged the depths of Hell
I have seen the march of progress, felt ravages of time
I've tossed my coins for wishes and lay drunk at fortunes well
I have lived a life erratic with no rhythm or no rhyme.
Now it's far too late to speculate if fate shall lead me to the gate
Where Peter waits to cogitate if I shall burn in Satan's grate.
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Written by Brett (1009 comments posted) 19th May 2008 | I loved this!
'I've tossed my coins for wishes and lay drunk at fortune's well.'
That's my kind of poetry, boyo!
'I have lived a life erratic with no rhythm or no rhyme.'
Also like the internal rhymes in the finishing couplet.
Great stuff.
Cheers |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (769 comments posted) 19th May 2008 | Yep, I think Brett picked out your top line.
"tossed my coins for wishes and lay drunk at fortune's well"
excellent
V |
Written by lovelysarah1984 (82 comments posted) 19th May 2008 | I love this! It's beautiful in such a simple way. I will rave about this for days! Definately one of my GW favourite pieces!
Well donexxx |
Written by Mr_E_Writer (226 comments posted) 19th May 2008 | Brett.
Thank you once, thank you twice,
I have cogitated your advice.
Cheers,
Eric.
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Written by Mr_E_Writer (226 comments posted) 19th May 2008 | Thank you, Veronica.
I also lay drunk at the Golden Lion, but it doesn't rhyme!
Cheers,
Eric. |
Written by Mr_E_Writer (226 comments posted) 19th May 2008 | Sarah, you really are lovely!
Thank you,
Orrible Eric xxxxx |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 19th May 2008 | What a profound piece of maudlin' ! No matter what kind of life we've lived, this is something most of us can relate to, at least in part.
Mia  |
Written by Mr_E_Writer (226 comments posted) 20th May 2008 | Mama Mia! How can I resist you?
Thank you for your kind words,
Eric. |
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