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Gap Year Chapter 20
By Leigh
19 May 2008
Tensions surface at a wedding

Chapter 20



Zara and Marcus Wiseman-French, newly proclaimed husband and wife, were being posed by their photographers before the various focal spots in Alveley Manor’s famous gardens.  Factions of the punch-quaffing guests were periodically rallied to bunch around the rapturous couple.

‘Stunning dress,’ Robyn admired as Jerry the photographer fanned Zara’s sprawling train around her.  ‘I’ve never seen so many sequins in my life.  It’s like Royal Ascot here, isn’t it?  I love her outfit – ’ she nodded towards a cousin with a nose job, in tiers of frappuccino chiffon.

‘Nah, still think you look the best, Robs,’ appraised Heidi loyally.  Robyn was wispy and elfin in delphinium blue, the shade an exquisite contrast with her titian tresses. 
Robyn for once quelled her instinct to pooh-pooh the sincere compliment.  She was here not only as a supplier but a friend, and had received more than one approving once-over from types who’d have barely spared the everyday Robyn, with her overalls and secateurs, the time of day.  She’d grinned overhearing two aunties in blinding diamonds cooing over the bouquets.  ‘Aren’t they ducky!  Dread to imagine the cost, though.  Even Zara must have had to re-mortgage.’

‘You’re not so tatty yourself.’  Heidi was in eye-stinging canary.  A short-skirted suit, and a fascinator blooming out of her head. 

‘Thanks very much.  Ah, look at diddums on his own.’  Warwick was slogging from foot to foot, tossing punch down his throat, clearly hating being there.  ‘To think this would have been me and him next month – yuck, the thought!’

Robyn smiled, relieved her qualms about Heidi seeing Warwick in a nuptial environment were proving unwarranted.  She half closed her eyes for a moment and let the rays bathe her bare arms.

‘Typical Zar,’ said Heidi, ‘probably clicked her fingers and ordered this perfect weather.’

‘When are they doing the dove release?  Hope it’s soon – I hate to think of those poor birds penned up too long.  Don’t really agree with that sort of thing, to tell you the truth.’

‘No, me neither.’

‘Could we have all of Marcus and Zara’s friends over here please?’ summoned Jerry.  There was a surge towards the cream gazebo which was forming the backdrop to this group shot.  Robyn smirked at the competitive shoving amongst certain girls, and their catwalk pouts.  She lagged at the back, not quite chummy enough with the bride to consider herself worthy of the foreground.

Heidi, a habitual back row occupant also, due to her height, couldn’t resist snaking up to the loath-to-be-photographed Warwick.  ‘Hard luck about the court case, Woz.’

‘Piss off Heidi.’

‘Manners!’

‘Now let’s have a nice big smile from you all – ’  Heidi and Robyn beamed charmingly.  At the edge of the shot slouched Warwick, whose scowl could have clotted cream.  ‘Everybody look this way one more time – ’

‘You haven’t met my friend Robyn, have you?’ Heidi hissed, ventriloquist style, not disturbing her camera-smile.  ‘Rowan’s sister.  If you’re wondering where Rowan is, he’s walking up in the Peak District with Emily.  Robyn’s friend Emily.  I believe you’re already acquainted with her.’

‘Emily?’  Now she had his attention.

‘Yes, Dominic, Robyn heard the full story from her last night.’

‘The walk’s with your brother?’
Warwick screwed his eyes shut with failure and let out his breath in a bitter wheeze.  If that streak of piss from the golf club was getting his mitts on Emily, it was nobody’s fault but Warwick’s.  Or rather Dominic’s. 
‘I’m amazed you’re taking it so well then, Heid – Em frolicking in the fells with your boyfriend.’
‘Oh, things never worked out between me and Ro.  Emily was more his type all along actually – pity she was otherwise engaged all that time, with a liar.’
‘Engaged not being an apt word in this case – that privilege hasn’t been enjoyed by anyone but you, my darling.  And won’t be by anyone else for a good decade yet, I imagine.’
‘Womankind can breathe!’  Robyn waved her hands in a praise-the-Lord fashion.
‘By the way,’ Heidi’s lips twitched with blatant glee, ‘so sorry to hear about Ben and Erin.’
‘What’s this?’ queried Robyn.
‘Only that it turns out the gorgeous Erin’s a lesbian.’ 
‘You’re kidding?’
‘No, she’s left him for a shepherdess in Christchurch,’ said Warwick.  ‘Now if you ladies will excuse me – ’
While the girls cackled like macaws, Warwick drooped away from the dispersing photographed friends and mused upon last night’s harrowing showdown with Emily.

Reviews
At last!!!!
Written by SammoR (111 comments posted) 28th May 2008
 
We now know Dominic's big secret. Boastful I may be, but I clocked it from the first few chapters the last time. 
 
You muddied the waters this time by creating a 'real' Dominic! Last time round I was 100% sure that Warwick was Dom - this time I was wavering on about 85 - 90%! 
 
Boy does Warwick have a big hole - or indeed several holes - to dig himself out of! 
 
Like the twist about the oh-so-perfect Erin!

Written by Leigh (226 comments posted) 29th May 2008
Thank you Sammo - I'm so grateful to you for wading through Gap Year! 
 
Can I ask at what point you twigged that 'Dominic' is really Warwick? I am genuinely interested, as I was concerned about my big twist being way too obvious - hence I decided to throw in the red herring of introducing the 'real' Dominic Osbourne much earlier (in my original draft we only learn of his existence when Emily reads the newspaper article). 
 
Final few chapters coming up... 
 
Leigh
Here goes....
Written by SammoR (111 comments posted) 29th May 2008
Hmmm...it's so long since I read the original version of the early chapters of GY that I can't really remember when I first twigged it. 
 
I think it started with the switch from the end of the Prologue, which involved Dominic and Emily, to the beginning of the first chapter, which had Warwick and Heidi. Thereafter, going from Warwick to Emily... 
 
There were similarities between Warwick and Dominic - the student or would-be-student thing. Dominic was also a man of mystery from the start, always acting as if he had something to hide, and giving implausible excuses. And then there was the family Christmasses thing ...seemed to me like Warwick had to be in two places at once.  
 
The last time, there was no mention of Dominic except in interaction with Emily - hence I was 100% sure he was Warwick's alter ego. This time the book reference made it clear that there was such a person. And yet, we never saw him other than when he was with Emily...so I stuck to my guns, was still sure they were the same person, although I alowed a small possibility that they might not be! 
 
I was looking out for Dominic taking Emily to his flat. If that flat sounded like a posh pad in Wolverhampton I'd have been satisfied that Dominic was Warwick! But whilst the flat was a typically grotty student flat, it was clear that Dominic took Emily to someone else's flat, and confused Emily as to where they were. 
 
The bit where Dominic reveals the partial truth ...got me feeling quite sure that the full truth involved who he was. 
 
BTW, being a bit of a legal bore, there was no real reason for either Warwick or his dad to be in court on the day of the trial. Neither of them had to give evidence. As long as their solicitor attends the defendant (the company) is treated as being present. When Warwick noticed that Emily was going to be there, he could easily have made excuses to his dad and left. 
 
Anyway, it's been a thrilling ride so far. Not read the last few chapters yet, am almost reluctant to do so - don't want to say goodbye to the characters! 
 

Written by Leigh (226 comments posted) 30th May 2008
Thanks for clarifying that Sammo. So you twigged pretty much straight away then. That was interesting to hear. Hmm...guess I don't write 'surprise' twists very well! 
 
This novel was quite an ambitious attempt really, and I do now feel I perhaps overstretched myself somewhat.

Written by Clifftown (620 comments posted) 5th June 2008
I agree with Sammo, really. I'd had an inkling about Warwick/Dominic, but you threw me off the scent by creating an actual Dominic...by the time we'd got to Dominic and Emily's "confrontation" I'd gone off the idea that they were the same person, so I was surprised when we went on to the court scene.  
 
An ambitious attempt? Definitely. You've created some brilliant characters and an intriguing storyline, plus you've kept me (with my famously short attention span!) hooked throughout. So in my book, that's a rather successful ambitious attempt! 
 
Off to read the last few chapters now.

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