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THE OLD CHEST
By meadowcroft1964
20 May 2008



That old wooden chest
Abandoned forever more
Stood behind the attic door
Her
Memories trapped
Between it's seams 
Holding all Spring's dreams
Tattered letters that love wrote
Filled with all Summer's hope
Season change his love can't cope 
Autumn Spring Winter tears
brings

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Written by mia_ms_kim (973 comments posted) 21st May 2008
I thought this was poignant. The trapped memory in the attic chest was vivid. The use of seasons to give a sweeping picture of one's life and his/her significant relationship, too, was good, too. But meaning was a little unclear in the last 2 lines. Did you mean "Auturm brings winter. Tears spring." or "Autumn brings Winter tears. Spring." The 2nd option (as is written) sounds awkward way to finish. Or maybe you meant it to be ambiguous. If so, I think it worked.... "Abanded -> Abandoned?" 
 
Mia 8)

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