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Reluctant Rainbow
By Katanga
22 May 2008

I hope this speaks for itself?

There's no pot of gold at the end of it!

Ho!

Cheers!

J K T



Reluctant Rainbow 


Under a reluctant rainbow
The sky begins to stir
Old memories of you
And of her 

It wasn’t easy, was it?

How could it ever have been?
With what we knew
And what we had
And the life we might have seen

T
he sky bears no malice
Toward lovers or strangers who
Must end their days in solitude
I can only think of you 

She intermingled with us
Without a reason why
Now I hang my head so lowly
And laugh – and then I cry 

For you and she were different
So separate from me
I was blind and foolish
I simply could not see 

The way everything was going
It was obvious enough
Let’s love each other forever
Peace! And all that stuff 

And so I sit and remember
How we used to be
Before she intertwined herself
Between you and me 

Now the sky is trembling
Can’t make up her mind
The rainbow is reluctant
To be brilliantly unkind

Reviews
Reluctant Rainbow
Written by awakenedmind (48 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
Critique is not my forte 
there seem to me to be many messages which can be read throughout this work, and from that many other works that could come from it. 
 
I liked it - but - and I can't say what the 'but' is. 
 
Some may say it could be 'tightened up' but maybe it would loose some of its simplicity? which is something that drew me to it. 
 
Anyway well done 
 
awakenedmind 
aka 
Michael

Written by Veronica_Milvus (1147 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
I'm not quite sure I follow the story of what went on with this little love triangle - but once again Tolstoy, you save two killer lines for the end. I like the love poems you have been doing recently, there seems to be a lot of wistful thought and honesty in them. Good stuff. 
 
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