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The Gallant Loser
By Katanga
23 May 2008

'The Three Gallant Champions' by Veronica got me thinking and typing.

Excellent, by the way  - go see it!

This is a paltry effort in comparison - just for fun.

Cheers!

John



The Gallant Loser


 

Last night there were three gallant chaps
Tonight there’ll be but two
For one was slain in battle today
And that leaves just me and you

He fought his fight through thick and thin
He fought it just for us
He wouldn’t have bothered had he known
Of the forthcoming nonsensical fuss

So down he laid his life for free
For a maiden he never had
What a fool! We may well cry
But he wasn’t all that bad!

He was actually a good boy
Brought up to stand proud and tall
Whatever made him go so far
As to fall on his sword at all?

For he was not slain in the usual sense
In fact no one wished him ill
He made a simple mistake, you see
And swallowed the bitterest pill

That being ‘Death’ – it’s hard to grasp
How horrid was his end
When it all comes down to the reckoning
And there’s nothing left to spend

Suicide I suppose it was
But we don’t wish to know
The how and the why and the wherefore
He simply had to go

So this just leaves the two of us
Gallant though we may be
Where do we go from here, my Friend
We’ll have to wait and see

Reviews
Not very paltry....
Written by tat_2man (56 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
If this is paltry I would hate to go against you in a competition. :) I especially like "So down he laid his life for free For a maiden he never had". Good job.

Written by Veronica_Milvus (637 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
who is dead? You, pj or Brett? 
 
and what grisly fate is going to befall the others? 
 
go home and take up knitting chain mail, it's safer than fighting.
Good Question!
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
Ha! That is the question! 
 
I shall send you a pm about this shortly (no offence to your stature meant!), since this is all getting rather nonsensically sensitive! 
 
Ho! 
 
Cheers! 
 
Your Weeping (K)night? 
 
Where's the spider? No, that's Arachnia. 
 
I am at home, actually, 'knitting chain mail' - a marvellous image for 'writing angry poetry'. Love it!  
 
Ha! I weep yet again . . . 
 
J K T

Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
Quite nice, Tolstoy, but I am sure whoever died would have bothered even in knowledge of the forthcoming nonsensical fuss otherwise he would not have been gallant. 
 
Nice piece. Cheers

Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
Do you know - I'm crying in my hanky for this gallant lad. Ooooh!!! Poor little sod. I don't think they'd lay their life down today for a maiden. Do we still have any maidens? I can't imagine putting that name to those rolling round the towns drunk on a Saturday night. So, are we finished then with mini-beasts or just taking a well-earned break? Now, back to grasshoppers, scorpions, beetles and all things crawling. Goodnight!
Dear, Josie
Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
Just because a Knight is drunk does not mean he is not gallant. I've been on some very gallant drunken nights!

Written by Veronica_Milvus (637 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
Brett, I could make an answer to your comment but I decline, being a blushing maiden myself.

Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
Believe it or not, this helped me understand VM's poem better! Coming from a different culture, the medieval images in VM's poem confounded me. After reading this piece, I could 'see' what her poem was about! Gallent indeed. 
 
This was fun! (At least this guys was a gallant WESTERN loser, if he was a Japanese SAMURAI's 'falling on his sword' would have been far more gruesome.) 
 
Mia :p
Not I
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
Am I missing something ? Not my own existence -- to the best of my knowledge  
 
Believe me I have every intention of fighting off that long night -- gallant suicide is oxymoronic to me  
 
patterjack

Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
patterjack's precise profundity. Couldn't agree more. 
Cheers
Hypothetical Horror!
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 23rd May 2008
Brett, PJ - thank you! 
 
The suicidal horror here is purely hypothetical - I would truly hate to lose either of you two chaps. And I'm not shuffling off the mortal coil of GW in a hurry! 
 
I suppose I am trying to say: 
 
Let's screw our courage to the sticking post. 
 
(what on earth?!) 
 
Cheers! 
 
John

Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 24th May 2008
Did this by any chance begin (after VM's original tale) with the old Scots folk song, "The Four Marys" -  
"Last night there were four Marys; 
Tonight there'll be but three. 
There was Mary Beaton and Mary Seaton 
And Mary Carmichael and me." ? 
 
I kept hearing echoes of it.
Four Marys!
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 24th May 2008
Ah, fellpony! 
 
You've sussed it! 
 
My opening two lines are a direct 'take' from the traditional Joan Baez song which you quote - I was wondering if someone would pick it up! 
 
As I recall, the king (the highest Stuart [steward?] of all) has his wicked way with her and she gets pregnant and into disgrace. Abortion not being an option in those days, she has the child and tries to 'get rid of it' in the the most heart-rending way . . . 
 
" I put him in a tiny boat 
And cast him out to sea 
That he might sink 
Or he might swim 
But he'd never come back to me." 
 
The king passes by haughtily on his horse and feels bad about all this and tries to rescue his conscience by pardoning her . . . 
 
"Well hold your tongue my sovereign leige 
And let your folly be 
For if you'd a mind to save my life 
The gallows I would not see." [slightly misquoted I think!] 
 
And so on - one of my all-time favourites. 
 
I can russle up the rest of the lyrics if you like? 
 
But I guess you know them backwards?! 
 
Cheers Sue! 
 
John X

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